|
Menu
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
Raped Into Willing
Contributed by
essentially9
on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:14:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
Raped Into Willing
The world of beauty
Starts to disappear
As I still breathe
And come near.
I touch a leaf soothingly
Only for the wet paint
To rub off onto me
In heart wrenching pain
Of being flawed unwillingly.
The stream gleaming in the light
Is not as beautiful as the starlit sky
With the suffocating darkening night
Now dripping in the painted lies
That were once pure white.
I see
At least,
The beauty
Of a masterpiece
Ruined flawlessly.
Copyright ©
essentially9
... [
2005-04-23 20:14:30] (Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment. That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:20:04 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Sheesh Jen. Blow me away why don't you?
I adore this. Especially all the stanza's after the first one.. lol. I think they are...louder? They stand out more, and I love the message and image behind them.
And that last line.. I could go on forever...
Great write,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:25:42 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
well done |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:32:16 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Your poems always touch the heart of me, as
though reaching out in desperation, not only
do i read them, but through your words i feel
you hurt as well, simply beautiful writting . . .
Dorian Chambers |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by ForeverAlone on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 08:39:09 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Jen....I really need say nothing...you are amzing.
Clark |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by TheVoice on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 09:54:57 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Another superb write Jennifer.
Thumbs up!
The Voice
|
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by fielding88 on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 10:56:57 PM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
OH! lol, it's extremely hard for me to describe the kind of knee-jerk reaction I got from reading that last line! lol it was amazing! I actually made a weird *shocked* kind of noise, just because once i read it I couldn't believe you said that. lol, but anyways the kind of descriptions you've given here of the sky, the water, and everything in between was stupendous(lol, just finished watching some looney tunes cartoons) and it was really a treasure in writing. Great stuff here. |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:30:33 AM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
woa i mean woa.
this piece is great .You are truely an amazing poetress..... |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Gothchyk on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 01:28:20 AM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
"In heart wrenching pain
Of being flawed unwillingly"
Amazing write. |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:47:33 AM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
wow Jen that was brilliant, I cant say anything that hasn't already been said, I adored this write, cant wait to read more
pix xx |
|
|
Re: Raped Into Willing
(User Rating: 1 ) by Channing on
Friday, 23rd September 2005 @ 02:03:07 AM AEST (User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Great write! |
|
|
|