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the day i fell in love with you
Contributed by
paul_x_walker
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Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 11:51:33 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The Day We Met Was a Dream Come True
i Will Never For Get The Day i Fell In Love With You
Now'
i'm Sitting With My Thoughts And Fears
Here Alone For Long Long Years
But For You My Love i Truthfully Kept
Can't You See That
i Miss You So Much
i Long For Your Touch
i Don't Want Too Be Here Alone
i Am Standing On a Clif
i'm Scared Stiff
i'm Missing You So Dearly
Loving You So Much
i'm Going Cold And Weary
i Lost My Sense Of Touch
Now My Blood Has Gone Cold
i Fear That i'm Dead
As The Night Falls
i'm Lying On My Death Bed...
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2005-04-23 11:51:33]
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by pixie on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 11:56:19 AM AEST
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that was good, but can I make a suggestion? maybe next time don't use capitlas at the beginning of every word as it makes the poem harder to read, well I found that any way. I think if you drop the cpitals on every word then you will have it spot on :)
take care
Pix xx |
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 12:35:35 PM AEST
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Lol that was good .Pixie girl is right.
dont cap the words like that it is hard to read sweety.Anyways it it a very good poem.
love mom |
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by Justingunshin on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 02:28:38 PM AEST
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| Very good poem, Couldn't of done a better job my self, Just make sure to lower down on the caps :) |
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by Jenni_K on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 04:18:26 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC..This is beautifully done......
Jenni |
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by Overstated on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:37:42 PM AEST
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ah!! beautiful piece - loved the lines 'i'm Sitting With My Thoughts And Fears
Here Alone For Long Long Years
But For You My Love i Truthfully Kept
Can't You See That...' overall i thought this was a poem to the highest standard
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by mina-1 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 06:33:57 AM AEST
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Jennifer this is indeed a very well written poem. Use capitals just for the start of ur poems, otherwise this is truly outstanding. Expressed deep and well. I'm really impressed. Well done darls. Keep up the brillant work.
Hugs,
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 11:44:09 AM AEST
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| I Like your poem. Great writing:) |
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Re: the day i fell in love with you
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by brew on
Wednesday, 3rd August 2005 @ 07:41:00 PM AEST
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Lots of talented here.............i hope you found your love , again.! Keep posting , your good.
Brew~ |
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