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WOUNDED
Contributed by
Onslaught
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Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 03:10:15 AM in AEST
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I've never been touched
By another human hand.
I've never been touched
By the breath of a friend.
I've never had a smile
Directed at me.
I've never been embraced in love,
Only in sympathy.
I've never known the feeling
Of even the slightest human connection.
I say that I don't want it,
But without it
My mind succumbs to the depression.
I am at war with my humanity.
I must never give in.
I don't want to be just another casualty.
But I am already wounded,
I am hurting so much within.
Copyright ©
Onslaught
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2005-04-22 03:10:15]
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Re: WOUNDED
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by inoc on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 03:33:22 AM AEST
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Oh what an enormous honest write...I want to help but I can't! The poem was written so humbly and I feel the wound...of you.
Remember God is by your side you just have to reach out to Him and pray in the same manner as this write humble yourself in repentance and....a smile might come upon your face and -YOU- will shine!!!
take care onslaught!
cheers!~
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Re: WOUNDED
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by Onslaught on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 03:41:04 AM AEST
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| Thanks for the kind words inoc and the advice but I think it is too late for me to ask God for anything. I could never fully convince myself that god exists. I just question too much and I see things about it all that don't quite make sense, and so I would just be lying to myself if I believed in god. Also if I were to believe in god now it would be for selfish reasons and only to get something in return and I am not that kind of guy. I would rather live in pain, die in pain, and go to hell than to pray to god only to get something in return for my belief. Its too late for me and god. |
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Re: WOUNDED
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by crap_snapper on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 04:37:02 AM AEST
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This is a very good poem and i liked it allot, i would however say it was maybe a little bit whiney. Although I did enjoy the very personal nature of the poem I think art can suffer when it becomes to much of a personal moan. A Christian God as such doesn’t exist and if her did he’d be an evil gimp, please don’t ask him for help, instead I’ve always looked to the inherent goodness in everything for my salvation. Life is God not Jesus.
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Re: WOUNDED
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by sride686 on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 05:55:45 AM AEST
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| What a great poem with so much emotion in it. This poem runs deep and touches my soul. I can really feel the pain and relate to it. Thank you for this good write and I hope you continue to write more….Steve |
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Re: WOUNDED
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by marshmalloska on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 07:44:52 AM AEST
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*imagine i have just repeated all of the amelorative comments above*
I personally feel a certain empathy towards what you have written( extremely well i must add). Im not sure what the answer to your conflict is, so i can only wish you happiness in the future =)
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Re: WOUNDED
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 06:42:38 PM AEST
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It's the same struggle I face. And it hurts, but if you can find encouragement that you are not alone in what you strive for, please do. I believe times will change.
Blessings.
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Re: WOUNDED
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 11:19:50 PM AEST
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One way I always deal with depression is to write my thoughts down.
Which you have done so skillfuly here.
Another excellent piece Mike.
Johnny. |
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Re: WOUNDED
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by dtborchert on
Wednesday, 27th April 2005 @ 08:51:25 PM AEST
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Mike,
You know I'm always here if you wanna chat. Or have intellectual banter.
Tena |
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Re: WOUNDED
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by Dorkfish on
Thursday, 30th June 2005 @ 06:33:35 PM AEST
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| That is such an honest piece. I wish I could give you a hug. I can't imagine feeling that way. Feel better and know that you are great writer! |
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