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As Darkness Falls
Contributed by
pixie
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Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 07:32:31 PM in AEST
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As darkness falls you can not escape,
Being held in by the devils tape,
You feel him pulling at your limbs,
& you can hear laughing the reaper grim.
Darkness falls softly around,
Creeping up not making a sound,
Trapping you in its deadly snare,
All the while you don’t know its there.
As you realise then it’s too late,
Death & the devil have sealed your fate,
Laughing as you struggle to break free,
I know this as it’s happened to me.
Many times I have fallen under this spell,
Been stuck down here alone in hell,
Try as I might I never got out,
There was nobody there to here my shout.
Darkness lurks where you can not find,
It lurks in the shadows, it lurks behind,
Behind a big black curtain of death,
Waiting for the moment to steal your breath.
Copyright ©
pixie
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2005-04-21 19:32:31]
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 07:35:05 PM AEST
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| Ceased to be amazed. veryvery well written. I truelly love this peice, it's just....awsome. |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by nogusto435 on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 08:15:31 PM AEST
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awesome i like the ending its awesome
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by spazz911 on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 08:23:54 PM AEST
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| You are so right, you can never hear it or see it for that matter, until its too late and you are trapped with no way out and well then you are stuck in your own hell with no way out, not that i have found yet, though there might be so keep looking, if you find one please tell me and we can rescue all else trapped down here |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by emystar on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 08:43:17 PM AEST
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A remarkable write, my friend.
awesome work.
huggs,
emy
this is the kindda write u read-n-scratch your head and say, huuuuuuummmmmmmmmm |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 09:09:48 PM AEST
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Pixie u write this poem as though u have been there, that last line took my breath away
now i've been there a very effective scenario
2 say the least, a perfect 10 peace of poetry
by a perfect poetess **********
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 10:21:38 PM AEST
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Good poem there I really liked the emotions
and how it was written. Another thing that
stood out was the repetition of "lurks" in the
last stanza. Great poem Kris.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by mina-1 on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 11:14:47 PM AEST
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Krissie you struck me deep with this one. I can so much relate to it that it scares me.
you never cease to amaze me my dear friend.
An excellent well written poem.
Hugs,
~Sue~ |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by blowfish_jane on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 08:03:58 AM AEST
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Krissie it's so good to see you post a new poem again.
This was so emotionaly writen which sows a lot of feeling and pain into it.
You've always known what a huge fan i am of your writing.
The last stanza was just perfection.
Hugs,
Jane~
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 11:06:26 AM AEST
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Well worth the wait!!
A dark and wonderfull piece Krisse!!! |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by bethie on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 12:33:12 PM AEST
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| Perfect example of dark British writing. Are you a fan of the band "The The"? This sounds like lyrics they would write. Dark and brooding, I like. |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by sride686 on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 12:26:21 PM AEST
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| This is another very powerful piece that really grabs the reader and makes them feel the anger and pain. I love your writing still and I like the way you talk about death. You also always have such strong endings to your writes. Take care and continue to write so I can read more of your work…..Steve |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by secretwind on
Monday, 27th June 2005 @ 07:51:00 PM AEST
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| I like it |
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Re: As Darkness Falls
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by lonestranger on
Thursday, 30th September 2010 @ 09:00:35 AM AEST
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| this is the same kinda stuff i write so of course i like it. very good |
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