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Dream of Infinity
Contributed by
justingunshin
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Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 10:51:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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In this dream, my eyes opened
finding myself in a world unseen
With every step I took, brought
me closer to the very beginning
Within the dream,I was entrapped
Reaching outwards for someone to
hear me, walking endlessly. this
dream didn't end
I continued to run, and run
But all there was, was circles
making me travel back to where
I was once again.
Feeling the depths and suffocation
like you are drowning, and you cannot
escape, the cycle remained infinite
where there was no end, and no
beginning.
Copyright ©
justingunshin
... [
2005-04-21 10:51:48]
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Re: Dream of Infinity
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 12:53:15 PM AEST
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ok I just had to comment. I couldn't help but noticing that as I read this you had 24 reads, 2 votes of a 5, yet no comments????
*befuddled*
This is a nice gentle poem. I feel it ended too soon, because there seems to be more to the story. But a good read nonetheless. :-)
Welcome to YPDC! I look forward to reading more of your work.
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: Dream of Infinity
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 07:17:55 PM AEST
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I thought you did a great job justin.
It could be alittle longer but oh well.
you did really well.
hugs
love mom |
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Re: Dream of Infinity
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by pixie on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 07:50:29 PM AEST
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a great poem, I hope to read much more from you :)
pix xx |
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Re: Dream of Infinity
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by Kie-Kie on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 01:41:47 PM AEST
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*giggles* I just posted a poem about dreaming a couple days ago
This poem is great though :D I love it, does seem a tad short, but still I loved it
I hope you keep writing poems like this and your last one, you're great :D
Love ya,
~Kiela~ |
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