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Broken monumental piece, My heart...
Contributed by
mina-1
on
Wednesday, 20th April 2005 @ 07:31:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Once flowing with erotic wild passion
Loving emotions dwelt inside
Tender thoughts and dreams
Filled it up with pride
It thrived on the merriment
It sung a joyous tune
Warmth and desire
Out shone the glorious moon
Then it found another keeper
Who took over the chore
There for awhile it mellowed in harmony
Love flowing through it forever more
Seasons came and went
A flaw started to grow
Each and everyday
More apparent it showed
Love started to seep
Through the cracked flaw
Leaving the core unprotected
Misery rearing its ugly claw
Pain and anguish
Crawled deep inside the cracks
Painting emotional blackmail
Suffering revealed within the tracks
This monumental piece
Is sadly my precious heart
When I handed it to you
You ill-treated it and broke it apart...
Copyright ©
mina-1
... [
2005-04-20 07:31:20]
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Re: Broken monumental piece, My heart...
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by inoc on
Wednesday, 20th April 2005 @ 07:51:30 AM AEST
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...a sad write but a good write...
take care now ....
cheers!~
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Re: Broken monumental piece, My heart...
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 20th April 2005 @ 08:36:38 AM AEST
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Sad but, as always, well written. I love the imagery. Keep in there.
klia |
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Re: Broken monumental piece, My heart...
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by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 20th April 2005 @ 10:43:55 AM AEST
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| Very heartfelt and stocked full of emotions. The imagery and feelings are so strong and can so easily be felt! keep it up. |
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Re: Broken monumental piece, My heart...
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by loveisendless on
Wednesday, 20th April 2005 @ 05:46:58 PM AEST
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SAD & SORROWED,I HOPE YOU'RE NO LONGER MAD BY TOMORROW,MAY HAPPINESS SOON BEGIN,I SAY MY HEART GOES OUT TO YOU MY FRIEND!
Lots Of Love,
DAN!! |
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Re: Broken monumental piece, My heart...
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 09:11:05 PM AEST
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| when someone gives you their heart, you should treat it as your own....and he just made his more colder. powerful and moving poem sue. this deserved more comments, and the people here that didnt comment...they are just heartless. pun intended. |
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Re: Broken monumental piece, My heart...
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by sride686 on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 06:54:45 AM AEST
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| Now Sue this is a good write and a little more my stile of work. Forget all that love poetry lost love is were its at. I’m just play in around girl but this is another good write. I’ve come to the conclusion that everything you right is powerful. Thank you for writing about a love that can give me hope. Take care…..Steve |
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