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The Place
Contributed by
NightOwl
on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 06:23:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Sinking deeper into my
mind slowly Relaxing in
my swirls of memories I
envision the
place I want
to
be
Not in your
arms No that would
be asking too much I just
want to be near
you To smell your
fresh scent To
look into
your beautiful
blue eyes and know
you care I want
to sit in
the
sunlight
Shining on your golden-colored wood
floor Relaxing in the depths
of the moment and in the
depths of your
heart.
Copyright ©
NightOwl
... [
2005-04-19 18:23:21] (Date/Time posted on
site)
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Re: The Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 06:46:20 PM AEST (User
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I thnk even tho it it free verse, with some form and structure, it could be even more beautiful!! (Just my 2 cents worth)
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Re: The Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 07:04:29 PM AEST (User
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Great write, very vivid. I am new to writing poetry , so i cant help critique it, but i loved it.
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Re: The Place
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 17th September 2005 @ 07:45:21 PM AEST (User
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beautiful....most of mine are free write too....i can't seem to get the hang of rhyming
but anyway....i like it |
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