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Black as Coal
Contributed by
lonelywolf04
on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 04:16:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Do you want to see,
What’s inside me,
What I can’t control,
Black as coal,
Filled with pain,
Walking in the rain,
Not knowing where you belong,
Not seeing what is wrong,
All that you wanted,
Has been taunted,
Within your sight,
And downright,
Mind screwing,
Body swinging,
Out of control,
In a room black as coal,
Can you see,
What’s in side me.
Copyright ©
lonelywolf04
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2005-04-19 04:16:46]
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Re: Black as Coal
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by reflections on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 06:32:58 AM AEST
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Yes! But only through the eyes of a coal miner. And then, only with the lights turned off. No matter how hard the darkness tries to hide our secrets . . . there’ll always be someone who can see in the dark.
Good poem.
Cheers
John
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Re: Black as Coal
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by In_a_while on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 12:35:16 PM AEST
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| Good job, i sense a whole lot of action going on that felt a lot like madness. Very dark and very powerful. Keep it coming! |
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Re: Black as Coal
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by Overstated on
Sunday, 24th April 2005 @ 05:45:44 AM AEST
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wow this was a dark piece of writing from you- 'Not knowing where you belong,
Not seeing what is wrong,
All that you wanted,
Has been taunted,' loved these lines i feel like this poem would be ace whispered then building to a shout
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