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S-U-I-C-I-D-E
Contributed by
jtkzlimz
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Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:35:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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it plays in my head like a movie rewind stop play rewind stop play. im affraid to it admitt that i either cant or i wont quit. Ive tried and Ive tried to stop but i cant. i used to see the letters now i just see the word. S, i cant stop, i wont stop, i dont need help, im fine, leave me alone. U, you cant make me stop, you dont know, you dont care. I, i dont know what to do, im scared, im alone. C, you see me but im not really there, you see what you want, there is nothing there.I, i dont want to know what to do, i dont want help from any of you. D, dont make, dont pretend like you know, dont help me, dont help me, dont leave me alone. E, everythings alright, everythings ok, everyone knows, everythings wrong. I cry and i scream, im mad and im sad. i dont know what to do, what should i do. the questions i ask the answer appears. S-U-I-C-I-D-E. no one knows know one cares im not really there. ive found my way out. Red is the color i cry Red is the color i see, Red is the blood that no one sees
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Re: S-U-I-C-I-D-E
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:39:40 PM AEST
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| woah this poem is put together well and is very powerful. i feel this way also so u r not alone..plz keep hope |
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Re: S-U-I-C-I-D-E
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by smiley_jennyxoxo on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:43:01 PM AEST
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| That's such an emotional poem. I've thought a lot about it lately. It isn't the only option you have though. I love the poem. Jenny |
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Re: S-U-I-C-I-D-E
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by Ineedanap on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:07:50 AM AEST
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| Thank you for writing this. i thought it was perfect and it described exzvtly how i feel when i am low. thank you |
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Re: S-U-I-C-I-D-E
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by Ineedanap on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 02:08:00 AM AEST
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| Thank you for writing this. i thought it was perfect and it described exzvtly how i feel when i am low. thank you |
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Re: S-U-I-C-I-D-E
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by twick on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 01:37:15 AM AEST
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This one is the best I've read so far. The emotion just seethes through the words. I really enjoyed, not to say this topic should be something to enjoy but, it felt like a real poem to me, if that makes any sense.
I still think though that changing your format a bit would add great flow so the reading knows when to stop or have to think about it like in(...like a movie, rewind, stop, play, rewind , stop, play) something like that would help, otherwise fantastic poem.
Keep writing for sure! |
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Re: S-U-I-C-I-D-E
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by Jlokitty on
Tuesday, 11th November 2008 @ 09:20:58 PM AEST
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| that's really good |
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