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When Nothing is Left
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 09:09:54 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The crucifing pictures
Better off unpainted
The martyred words
More fitting unwriten
The extorted hues
More suitabaly achromatic
The chafing positism
Better exceedingly cynic
The sinfully pure
More surpassing stained
The falsly genuine
Better sensibly unfeigned
The tortured life
More aided by death
...
In the sence
That the end comes
When nothing else is
Left
Copyright ©
ForeverAlone
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2005-04-18 21:09:54] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: When Nothing is Left
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 09:47:04 PM AEST (User
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this is better than you think. makes me think that you got some of your ideas from my poems, or the naming of one anyway =] i really liked this for the substance and the rhymes. |
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Re: When Nothing is Left
(User Rating: 1 ) by spazz911 on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 09:55:08 PM AEST (User
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i like it...a lil confusing but still really good...
~kc~ |
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Re: When Nothing is Left
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 10:14:41 PM AEST (User
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This is excellent expression, rather powerful. There is quite a lot to think about here.
Well done.
Andrew |
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Re: When Nothing is Left
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jaycee on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 10:51:47 PM AEST (User
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I'm with spazz911 on this. There are some powerful thoughts to consider, but I'm not sure of the message. Or maybe just considering the thoughts is the message... |
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Re: When Nothing is Left
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 11:42:17 PM AEST (User
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Oh, I do like this! I prefer a poem that prods the reader to thinking... wondering... considering - and this most certainly does that. Sometimes, indeed, saying less is giving more.
Well crafted. Keep writing!
~SNM~ |
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Re: When Nothing is Left
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 04:08:29 PM AEST (User
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I like your thought process in this write Clark. It's kind of abstract and veiled, the emotions are strong nonetheless.
This poem kind of sounds like a bit of a self struggle to me.
Good read, thank you!
Scorp. |
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