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Existence in Despair
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 01:45:28 AM in AEST
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Please, tear out my eyes
For it would be preferable
To stumble through life blind
Than to see the kissing lovers
And to notice the tears
That trickle down my arms
From my downcast eyes
Oft times the wind has blown
And the biting rain has torn at my eyes
Forcing me to my knees
Upon some desolate highway
Please, tear out my ears
For I would rather not hear your voice
Then be lead astray by your lies
For they are like razors
That caress my insides
Oh, please, tear out my ears
So I cannot hear myself weeping
Oft times the music has played,
But now I only hear a depressing dirge
A cacophany of off key sounds
That stalk my blackest dreams
Please, tear out my lips
For I would rather be mute
No more mourning in my muteness
Just frustration because I cannot express (my "love")
Crying behind these broken hands of doubt
Realizing self-dismemberment as the only way out
Regret my only form of speech
Oft times the sadness has been spawned
By intimating my true feelings
The shadows mock my misfortune
As I pray to forget the gift of speech
Please, tear out my heart
For I would rather feel nothing
Than feel the pain
That eats from the inside
With every beat of my heart
The depression blossoms within
As my heart grows swollen with unshed tears
Oft times the sun has shone
And brought beauty to my heart,
But now only the clouds prevail
As my heart drips with sadness
And as the mo(u)rning begins
I pray for the night's return
So I can hide my swollen eyes
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bobotheclown
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by keerthy on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 01:51:15 AM AEST
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this was so good.beautifully expressed.very intense...u make the reader fall for ur style of writing...keep up the gr8 work....u rock!
hats off 2 u
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by Eclipse on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 02:37:20 AM AEST
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that depicts pain so well, thanks for sharing your amazing talent..
you have used great lines in this poem, I particularly liked 'please, tear out my heart, for I would rather feel nothing'
don't ever lose hope in yourself, you often forget how much you really have
Eclipse xox |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by Jenni_K on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 06:59:20 AM AEST
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WOW Joel!! You have outdone yourself with this.... Excellent work. I love the style...
Hope you are all right.
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by Nomie on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 10:14:37 AM AEST
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wow...this brought tears to my eyes. U've just explained the exact pain i am going through right now.
I feel it intensly, as i read along ur words... |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by blue_angel on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 11:22:17 AM AEST
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gosh, this poem is just... undescribable. it reels the reader in... made me feel your pain. its just like, i read it and think, wow, you just described me.
wonderful brilliance,
luv n hugs,
jennie* |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 03:37:29 PM AEST
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Joel, this was just breathtaking. The emotions was just overwhelming, making me feel every pain that is behind this.
I hope you're ok sweetie.
Jane~ |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by EmoDCgirl36 on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 07:47:30 PM AEST
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| I like how you used the italics and how you used just different ways to make the reader feel more of the pain than how you'd depict it if it was straightforward reading...kinda like mine. Oh well. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by Chanti on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 12:38:36 AM AEST
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beautiful write joel,
im feeling a similar way right now, most likely not for the same reasons. I hope that in time you can rid yourself of these feelings because there are so many beautiful things you must be shutting out.
-chanti * |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by FleurdeSang on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 05:17:17 PM AEST
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Cheri Joel... I totally feel this, my friend. Flawless from beginning to end. I wish I had more to say, yet, sleep deprivation and speechlessness over whelm me. More words of praise and beauty once they are suitable! Exquisite piece of poetry, dear friend. All my love! Forever,
Your eternal friend/fan,
Stephy. *who sends many hugs for a hurting friend* |
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Re: Existence in Despair
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 25th May 2005 @ 11:15:22 PM AEST
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these lines struck me,
"Then be lead astray by your lies
For they are like razors
That caress my insides"
silence heals...while everything else kills. that used to be an old motto of mine, and i was reminded of it.
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