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The Tarnished Silver Lining
Contributed by
essentially9
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Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 07:13:49 PM in AEST
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The Tarnished Silver Lining
Her golden wings are tarnished
With her infected blood of hate.
All her dreams of love are missed
When her wings started to fray.
The obstructing clouds of the sky
Darken with all of the angel's lies.
The sun no longer shines bright,
Because the moon sheds its light.
The dazzling stars start fade in their brilliance,
As the beautiful visage loses its resemblance
To what was once a semblance worth beholding
And never ever worth forgetting.
Yet, the angel forgot her beauty
When her wings started to bleed.
She forgot, because she didn't see
That her beauty has aged to be
As ugly as the inside became to me.
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 07:21:38 PM AEST
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Jen...You really should look inside again..You are not ugly..open your eyes...You happen to be one of the very few people that I respect as a person, I can not say that for many.....The poem is written with all your brilliance jen, as normal an amazing post, by the beautiful you...
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by Tru2Myself on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 07:36:26 PM AEST
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Beautiful! I love this. Its amazing
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 09:10:46 PM AEST
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What a sad poem makes me wonder will things ever get better u r coming through like
a cry in the night beautifuly expressed . . .
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by TheVoice on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 10:48:37 PM AEST
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Jennifer,
first of all, you are beautiful on the inside. that part i have no doubt about. as for the fading of the suns light because of the moon, sometimes the sun blinds us with its light and the moon reflects the light of the sun for a clear picture. i thoroughly enjoyed this write. you are truly an angel sent from heaven above.
The Voice
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by Willofree on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 11:31:21 PM AEST
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A powerful poem, which seems to represent a negative inward perception. The poem is beautifully written. The good thing about "tarnished silver", it can be repolished.
A great poem,
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by fielding88 on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 07:36:37 PM AEST
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| Lovely write. Seemed sincerely done, and in such an imaginative way. The last line here was delivered with a high degree of skill, something which I've pretty much come to expect in all your writes, and have not once been disappointed. That second to last stanza really spoke to me, reminding me of things in my life personally that I wanted to forget, but are not at all worth forgetting. This was not only a great piece, but it also spoke to me, which made it that much better. Hopefully, this isn't a poem about yourself, and if you did come to this conclusion, ask around and I'm sure you'd get a different answer :P Great write! |
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Re: The Tarnished Silver Lining
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 4th October 2005 @ 03:33:57 AM AEST
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Well done...this has the feel of an introspective write. Perhaps angry or sad (or both), with some decisions, or lack thereof, in the past.
Coming down hard on yourself for a past that cannot be changed. This is thought provoking, and emotive.
Very good job Jen.
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