|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
The Waiting Room
Contributed by
freckle
on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 10:20:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
|
The Waiting Room
She sat, tired and ill
waiting
Age had long ago
mauled her youth
Deep lines
left reminders
of a hard,
hard,
life
She sat in blue,
an airy sundress
on a clear
spring day
Embroidered flowers
adorned
her breast
She moved
in and out
of sleep
Her aliments great
waiting
for the doctor's care
They came,
helping her
into the silver wheelchair
She waited
out of breath
a yellow daisy
clutched
in her grasp.
Carol
Copyright ©
freckle
... [
2005-04-16 22:20:14]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: The Waiting Room
(User Rating: 1 )
by linagalMBfan01 on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 10:42:25 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
wow i like the way u described the elderly woman. great write.
lina |
|
|
Re: The Waiting Room
(User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 10:46:24 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| one time i was in a waiting room for 8 hours. safe to say i never went to that hospital again. great write carol. |
|
|
Re: The Waiting Room
(User Rating: 1 )
by fielding88 on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 12:13:19 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| wow, this was truly well done. i'm amazed by your ability to so properly capture the mood and the setting and the calmness and almost serene nature of everything that goes on in that hospital. Well done! |
|
|
Re: The Waiting Room
(User Rating: 1 )
by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 06:11:33 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Carolita, that was such a great write. It was so simple yet so efective.
I liked you're descriptions of the woman.
She sat in blue,
an airy sundress
on a clear
spring day
Embroidered flowers
adorned
her breast
That was just perfection.
Jane~ |
|
|
Re: The Waiting Room
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 12:57:27 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
What a great poem !! I love the way you describe the lady , I could picture her in my mind...
Leia |
|
|
Re: The Waiting Room
(User Rating: 1 )
by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 09:31:49 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Beautiful write carol very creative . . .
Dorian Chambers |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
