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Where Nothing Belongs

Contributed by Urizen on Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 04:47:37 PM in AEST
Topic: SecretLove

I am alone;
What can I do?
I feel so confused, sitting here spying on you,
I know you can't feel it but I know it wrong,
I'm stuck in this world where nothing belongs.

You're kind, you seem to know and understand it's true,
But I can't get out this fear that I really don't know you,
And each night this fear keeps creeping along,
And I'm stuck in this world where nothing belongs,

I hope a thousand angels sing you to your rest,
Each moment I spend with you is well and truely blessed,
I wish I could stay awake and write you a million songs,
but It's seems that I'm stuck in this world where nothing belongs.

You say you don't mind and you're quite happy to wait around,
You've the patients of a saint and an ear to the ground,
I stumble and my feet they don't hold me upright for long,
You're the only thing that matters in this world where nothing belongs,

I sense the darkness moving slowly in,
It's not fair on you to suffer, while I sink,
Even if you wanted it too, I know nothing could go on,
I can't escape from this world where nothing belongs.

Copyright © Urizen ... [ 2005-04-16 16:47:37]
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Re: Where Nothing Belongs (User Rating: 1 )
by rockergirl94 on Saturday, 30th July 2005 @ 12:41:01 AM AEST
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There's quite a few things that I really like about this poem. I like you're repition of "this world where nothing belongs" it really ties your poem together.

I also like how the poem seems portray the changing of your emotions. Like in your poem, you go from feeling as if you don't really know the person, to feeling as if they are the only ones that matter, to feeling like it won't work out.

One suggestion is you might want to work one these two lines, "I sense the darkness moving slowly in, It's not fair on you to suffer, while I sink" just because they don't really fit the rhyme scheme of the poem. Thats the only thing I can come up with to improve though. Great job!
- Julie

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