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Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
Contributed by
bobotheclown
on
Monday, 23rd December 2002 @ 05:00:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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As I beg and plead
For you to leave me alone
As I cut and bleed
Trying to appease
Feeling the razor's biting kiss
As addicting as heroin
Or a girls' sweet kiss
Something I'll never taste
In anger, confusion, madness
I cut deep, oh so deep
As the razor kisses my skin,
Turning me on, intimate, how passionate,
But you want still more
Never pleased with my offering
Leaving me lying on the floor
Staining the wood a deep red
Feeling so useless and used
As I stumble 'round
Looking for something to staunch
The blood and hurt
Crying, diluting the blood
Pitiful, adding another cut
Confused, dumb, and broken
Death, oh so sweet
Give me something
To nurse the hurt away
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2002-12-23 05:00:00]
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by Kay-P-M-Devenish on
Monday, 23rd December 2002 @ 05:54:59 AM AEST
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This is vivid poetry expressing pain so perfectly, it evokes many images but mainly the image of total agony.You are indeed a poet , please keep on writing as eloquently as the above and may you live many many years as without the likes of you the world would indeed be a poorer place.
Best wishes to you always
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Kay Devenish |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by Kay-P-M-Devenish on
Monday, 23rd December 2002 @ 05:57:10 AM AEST
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| May I also add I do not know how to work the score section correctly and in fact I actually do rate your poem with the highest score. |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by OreO on
Monday, 23rd December 2002 @ 05:57:44 PM AEST
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This is one of my favorites bobo...i enjoyed reading this one alot you certainly write with a style all of your own....thanks for sharing it...
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:. |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by Ilhar on
Thursday, 26th December 2002 @ 01:47:46 PM AEST
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| This is well written your style is good. The content is very vivid. |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by AllAlone on
Thursday, 26th December 2002 @ 02:21:15 PM AEST
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| wow the pain and fear just pours out onto the reader! extremely well written |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by Ilhar on
Friday, 27th December 2002 @ 09:18:00 AM AEST
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| your work is very good. Hang in there so many people need to know they are not alone..you share your pain so strongly..you have a definite gift. |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by ashleigh4 on
Sunday, 29th December 2002 @ 06:50:08 AM AEST
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Feeling the razor's biting kiss
As addicting as heroin
Or a girls' sweet kiss
Something I'll never taste
wow... this is so much like me, i love this stanza, it's melodic and beautifully written....
well done mate |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 7th January 2003 @ 01:08:50 PM AEST
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| oh! how did i miss this one when u posted it? it's so good, it's so so good, 'give me something to nurse the hurt away...oh god that almost made me cry...you write beautifully joel, i hope you know that... |
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Re: Razor's Biting Kiss (Nurse the Hurt Away)
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by M on
Monday, 13th January 2003 @ 11:28:48 AM AEST
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| This is incredible, and so true. |
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