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Agonized Allure
Contributed by
Shishke_Bob
on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 06:23:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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Agonized Allure.
Enraptured I
Have cast my eye
And it has stopped on you
As you sit there
Still unaware
Of what you put me through
I say the lines
Show all the signs
But you don’t even glance
And so I try
To walk on by
You wont give me a chance
And deep inside
the pain i hide
I wish I knew your name
I burn as fire
As I inquire
The answer is... chow mein.
Copyright ©
Shishke_Bob
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2005-04-15 18:23:20]
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 06:41:50 PM AEST
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It's inspiring, and I'm hungry.
I think we can all identify with the emotion expressed here. A truly timeless first submission.
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Jackee_line on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 09:12:31 PM AEST
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| Cool well done , i love chow mein---lol |
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 16th April 2005 @ 02:20:51 AM AEST
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This is well written and unique, I love it.
Leia |
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 19th April 2005 @ 04:03:26 AM AEST
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Oh me, you've done it again.
Luv your style of writing.
Yeah, I'm hungry now too.
Welcome and keep up the good work.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 28th April 2005 @ 01:52:49 PM AEST
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Of course... now understand the burning in my flesh, the yearning in my heart.
I must have... chow mein? Ok, it works. Maybe a little too, melodramatic, or some big word like that, but it works.
Take care Bobby,
David |
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Horsecrzy13 on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 06:25:33 PM AEST
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Interesting......
Brina! |
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 08:46:32 PM AEST
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beautifully written, warm welcome to ypdc:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 06:23:56 AM AEST
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Inscrutable. As deep as any dish I have pondered, as complex as any Won Ton soup I have lovingly eaten....lovingly eaten, ahhhhhhhhh. Sorry, What Oh, yes the poem. A very different first posting, where most people (including moi) try to power up a big angsty piece to establish their site cred as a "POET".
I think this is a new genre in the making. Present it to an ad company - I do believe you're on a winner.
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Re: Agonized Allure
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 21st May 2005 @ 11:58:15 PM AEST
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Truly a relatable piece. I know whereof you speak... I haven't really told anyone this - but... the truth is, I've fallen head over heels for chop suey... lol.
Welcome to YPDC! What a way to come through the door. *smiles*
~Snemmy~ |
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