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I deserve alot better than you...
Contributed by
mina-1
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Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 02:14:57 AM in AEST
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Look at what you've done to me
You've broken me apart
I was once a confident girl
With a very loving heart
You walked into my life
Things were never ever the same
You abused my trust
To you I was simply a game
I can no longer take
This burden that dwells in my heart
I must free myself of you
Before my body wears your art
What did I ever do
To deserve such bitter pain
All I wanted was someone
Who'd love me and hold me through the
rain
You've totally destroyed me
To my very core
You said you loved me
But treated me like a whore
Please let me go
To live my life in peace
I want this pain to stop
The anguish to settle and ease
You forever said you loved me
Yet you treated me so unwell
So leave you I must
To vacate myself from this hell
I'm ending this right now
To save whatever's left of me
As I cry a river of tears
For at last I'll finally be free
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by emystar on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 03:45:32 AM AEST
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A bit sad but awesomly written.
Hang in there, my friend.
U r a great person and life will treat u kind.
I certainly can relate to this write in a big way. Once I had enuff I did the same thing and even tho I've been alone for close to six years I'm happy. I've also found my best friend in life once again and I'm double happy for that. He and I talk on the phone and I'll be seeing him in the near future.
luv, huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by brokenwings on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 04:11:11 AM AEST
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| your words are so true, coming from someone who know the pain all to well... but one day we all find what we deserve... sometimes its right before your eyes... but i would like to have my ex read this but it is a great write.. |
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by venkat on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 06:15:38 AM AEST
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| How sad and painfull to read such lines from a lovely girl whose heart is broken apart. sorry but recover soon my dear young lady..you have written it so well and it captivates me :-) venkat |
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by reflections on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 10:58:35 AM AEST
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The pain leaps out at the reader. No-one ever does anything to deserve the pain of one who does not speak truth, or does painful acts to one he claims to love. The blame is on the liar, and user. Love, and constant pain, created by the person loved, is not compatible. Your poetry sends the mental image of one who DOES possess confidence, and a loving heart. Making a mistake does not delete either. Discovering, admitting, and solving those mistakes are the signs that prove your strength. Don’t let a fool rule. Your strength is in your words. Believe in what you write. That’s your strong side speaking to you. Read what you write. That’s your smart side learning from you. You must understand that you have everything necessary to be happy . . . already within you. Your poetry shows that.
Cheers
John
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 01:38:06 PM AEST
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A strong and beautiful write, yet senitive in it's
plea . . .
Droian Chambers |
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 02:46:15 PM AEST
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Sue,
This poem is beautiful and so honest and heartfelt . I have slowly been fighting these very emotions . Thank you
Hugs
Leia |
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by sride686 on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:02:20 AM AEST
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Well as you know by looking at my work I’m new to this site but I wish I would have read your work sooner. You write with so much passion and I love the words you use to say what you want to say. This line just got me of guard and it made the poem so much more effective.
You've totally destroyed me
To my very core
You said you loved me
But treated me like a whore
when you put something so negative in you write as this word it really grabs the reader and makes them feel your pain and anger. this piece was outstanding and I thank you for sharing it. Take care Sue and I'll continue to read more of your work on another day.....Steve |
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Re: I deserve alot better than you...
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by loveisendless on
Thursday, 5th May 2005 @ 12:23:56 AM AEST
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IF THINGS ARE REALLY FRIGHTNING,
& MAKES YOU REALLY WONDER,
THEN LET ME HOLD YOU WHEN IT LIGHTNINGS,
& EVEN WHEN IT THUNDERS,
NO MATTER HOW BRITE IS THE FLASH,
& LOUD IS THE BOOM,
TOGETHER WE CAN CRASH,
TOGETHER IN A ROMANTIC ROOM!
GREAT POEM-HE CAN JUST KISS OFF!!
Lots Of Love,
DAN!!!
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