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Life is a Prison
Contributed by
Richard
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Sunday, 22nd December 2002 @ 09:00:00 PM in AEST
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Life is a prison,
Oh God let me out.
No one to listen,
To hear when you shout.
Climb the walls of insanity,
Ride the waves of despair.
If you fall it don't matter,
There's no one to care.
Used to wish for a window,
To see birds, trees and sky,
But you're better without one -
Stops you aiming too high.
Watching freedom is painful,
For those locked away.
Seeing joy, love and happiness,
Another price that you pay.
Strong is good, weak is bad.
Be it false, be it true.
Your mind makes the choice,
And enforces it too.
Cell walls built by society,
With rules to adhere.
If you breach the acceptable,
You had better beware.
Hide the pain, carry on,
Routine is the key.
Don't let on that you're not,
What you're pretending to be.
Lock it all up inside you,
How badly that bodes.
Look out for that one day,
When it all just explodes.
Leaving naught but a shell,
Base functionality too.
But killing all else,
That was uniquely you.
So how do you grow,
With a timebomb inside?
Or how to defuse it,
Without destroying its ride?
You can't.
Copyright ©
Richard
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2002-12-22 21:00:00]
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by Valerie_Pearson on
Sunday, 22nd December 2002 @ 09:30:44 PM AEST
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| there was nothing to laugh at, this was a fabulous write, I'm glad you shared it, keep up the great work, |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by LOWMAN613 on
Sunday, 22nd December 2002 @ 11:54:33 PM AEST
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Richard,your work is great,No reason to laugh,this was a great write for a beginner!!!
Keep writing! Christina |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by OreO on
Monday, 23rd December 2002 @ 04:13:56 PM AEST
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Laugh???? Are you serious??? This poem ROCKS!!!!! I enjoyed this write alot, and i agree Life is a Prison, and the way you wrote it all out here, what better way is there to describe it? I enjoyed reading this one Richard and i look forward to reading more of your poetry ...welcome to YPDC...and keep em' coming....i want to read more...
.:*~*:.OreO.:*~*:. |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by RICHARD_CAMPBELL on
Wednesday, 25th December 2002 @ 01:43:47 PM AEST
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HI RICHARD,
MY NAME IS ALSO RICHARD AS YOU CAN SEE,
THIS IS A VERY GOOD WRITE,IT TELL THE PAIN OF PRISON LIFE SO TRUE.
KEEP UP THE GOOD WRITE.RICHARD CAMPBELL. |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th December 2002 @ 05:29:42 PM AEST
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| Richard is so gay, get out of prison and take some happy drugs. Keep up the work, bloody pome. |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 01:30:11 PM AEST
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Absolutely nothing to laugh at. Your poems are great...like Shakespeare:)
Krista |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th March 2003 @ 01:31:56 PM AEST
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Absolutely nothing to laugh at. Your poems are great...like Shakespeare:)
Krista |
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by faffeee on
Sunday, 13th April 2003 @ 10:47:06 AM AEST
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richard, i thought that was a very well structured, amazingly emotive poem and nothing to laugh about. u have managed to express the exact feelings of 'life in a prison' -
"Used to wish for a window,
To see birds, trees and sky,
But you're better without one -
Stops you aiming too high. " expresses exactly how its so simple to give up, or give in to these awful feelings.
"Don't let on that you're not,
What you're pretending to be. " you have captured perfectly so many feelings that i and so many people recognise and loathe.
and to the 'Guest' who thought they were being smart, it is obvious why you have nothing to comment on apart from being derogatry and silly - u cant even look far enough into the poem to see that it could be more than about a real prison. ignore this person richard, it was fab. xxx
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Re: Life is a Prison
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by faffeee on
Sunday, 13th April 2003 @ 10:49:50 AM AEST
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| oh i just read that and realised krista might have thought i was talking about her - not at all, i meant the anonymous guest!! xxx |
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