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The Love Not Meant to Last
Contributed by
essentially9
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Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 09:28:15 PM in AEST
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The Love Not Meant to Last
You seem to seek the love of others
That was never given by your mother.
You are so full of your self delusional lies
That you're empty of everything else inside.
You've been so lost and confused
That you think you're born to lose.
You were born for so much more,
But you won't get up off the floor.
Your bruises get more discolored
As your face loses all of its color.
Your wrists still bleed the infection
Of hate and loveless affection.
You start to push everyone away
Hoping they'll still care for another day
When they never did in the first place.
Your lies that were so serrated
Finally made their love fade.
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essentially9
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by tx_graffiti_gal on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 09:39:26 PM AEST
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| I thought of myself as I read this. having a hard childhood and wanting to be loved. then the poem went another way. great write... |
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by Kie on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 09:51:43 PM AEST
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In a sense our childhood is the baggage that we carry or cut loose when we become adults. But sometimes the fall out comes from something that began as a vine and chokes out what could be or could have been.
Lies come from insecurity and anger is a result of being hurt. It is all intertwined and it is sad.
Until a person makes the decision to change in a positive way, what can you really do?
Just rambling aloud. I really enjoyed the point and context of your poem.
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by TheVoice on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 10:53:11 PM AEST
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A piece that pulls hard at the heart strings. I feel the emotions of this write.
Thank you for posting it.
The Voice
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 11:08:33 PM AEST
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| lol it's kind of funny, I don't think I should have read this one right now, only because your writes simply seem to amplify emotions. Personally, I may be able to relate to this one too easily, and I can so understand the plight of your write. This is such a strong way of tackling the subject matter, focusing on common life situations and imagery to get your point across. It was done with a sense of force and skill that you make look too easy. Sad write, hopefully life can kind of jerk people to the polar opposite of these emotions sometimes, just as a reminder to their existence. |
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by emystar on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 12:52:54 AM AEST
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Good work, my friend.
A masterpeice.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by smiley_jennyxoxo on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 01:00:36 AM AEST
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| That was a great poem! I can sortof relate to that. I wanna be loved. It seems some days everyone just ignores me though, and don't even like me, except for my bf. I'm an only child so it's always lonely in this house on weekdays when my parents work at nights. I rarely ever lie though. I'm friendly and I like to be honest with my friends. That's how you gain trust and good treatment from them in the future... I can too feel the strong emotion of the poem. I love it. Jenny |
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 01:25:01 AM AEST
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So...Jen...Is this you giving your thoughts on me....?...sadly jen...this was below your normal effort.....But still a master piece in its own..and compared to all the crap posted on this site..its still high up on the ladder...
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by DorianChambers on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 01:45:53 AM AEST
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Very touching poem nice peice of writting . . .
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Re: The Love Not Meant to Last
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by venkat on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 01:52:16 AM AEST
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| Good work my dear ..very impressive depiction of a charecter. :-)venkat |
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