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Perfect Girl
Contributed by
faith_my_eyes
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Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 03:33:23 PM in AEST
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she tries too hard to be perfect,
and she always dies inside,
she had been trying so hard to be perfect,
but there are feeling she cannot hide.
she sees herself as imperfect,
she feels so sad,
she looks back on her life,
wishing for things she had,
so she tries to make herself perfect,
which is too hard,
nobody is perfect,
so that's why she is passed out in the yard.
she tried too hard to be perfect,
oh, Lord know she tried,
she starved herself, made her self throw up,
she drank, smoke, then in sadness she cried,
she cried because she was imperfect,
so imperfect she almost died.
Death almost captured this girl,
so critical to the world,
she is imperfect,
but she is a pearl,
a precious gem,
everyone is an imperfect gem,
we need imperfect gems to make a perfect world.
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by DorianChambers on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 03:37:50 PM AEST
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A very facinating peice of writting, a lot of
wisdom went into this, a lot of thruth came
out . . .
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Dying_Angel on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 03:46:32 PM AEST
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| I can't give you any weird philophosy on what the hell this poem means...because its so clear. Clear and soooo sad...jenxx |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 03:56:50 PM AEST
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| so sad but true, well done in writting this one |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Kie on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 09:48:08 PM AEST
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It makes me not only wonder if girls see themselves as perfect. I suppose in a way, its a goal. I can't really relate to this because, i've never felt perfect.
But I think your wisdom and philosophy are right on.
I was impressed with your poem.
Kie |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 10:03:27 AM AEST
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What a poem Em, i like the thought you gave to ths write.
I used to know what it feels like to be this girl, brought back old memories.
Loved it tho.
Jane |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 12:44:28 AM AEST
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| This is deep, and I loved it. Since it's such an older poem then I take it you've always carried such talent. Nicly done. |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by freckle on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 09:47:53 PM AEST
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Good analogies in this write. Such a sad subject but one that is still too often ignored. Good job.
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Overstated on
Saturday, 23rd April 2005 @ 07:38:35 PM AEST
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this poem gets my thumbs up! it feels so professionally done you should be very proud of this effort- it actually gets better with every read!
well done indeed... |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Willofree on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 07:53:45 PM AEST
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This poem is a good case senario on how a bulemic see's themself and the world. I agree that this poem displays a lot of wisdom.
Well done
Will
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 05:29:33 AM AEST
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this is a very good written poem! kind of
sad! but it was good. |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 03:22:52 PM AEST
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| very clever and a wonderful tribute! |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Nezenic on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 11:18:43 AM AEST
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| i love the rhyme and rhythm that was put into this.. very creative poem, I really enjoyed reading it. |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by liquidsunshine on
Thursday, 16th June 2005 @ 05:57:43 PM AEST
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An interesting perspective. I like it.
Love and peace,
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 19th July 2005 @ 12:14:27 PM AEST
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I know what you mean Em.
I am glad i check this write out.
very wise words for one so young.
good write.
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Shnannon on
Friday, 12th August 2005 @ 11:26:10 AM AEST
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| Well done. I think you captured a lot of feelings teenage girls go through, even if they don't deal with bulimia. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Archie on
Thursday, 6th October 2005 @ 10:52:22 PM AEST
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| This poem captures in it the truth about life. I think we are gold that needs to be refined to make us perfect. |
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Re: Perfect Girl
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by Sinned on
Thursday, 13th April 2006 @ 08:39:55 AM AEST
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You have captured most every young girl.The feeling of wanting to please everyone' be accepted and all the while doubting themselves not really thinking that noone is perfect.You must have been about thirteen at the time you wrote this.---------Good writing.
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