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No one cares
Contributed by
spazz911
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Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 10:49:36 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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No one cares
The buses file out one by one,
just waiting to get the job done.
What happens after that?
HECK they don’t care,
Until the one day
the girl isn’t there.
And then they’ll assume
that its just the one night
But what they don’t know
will give them a fright.
No she’s not sick,
and she hasn’t moved
she just gave up the fight
and died in that room
Now the question remains,
What could it have been?
The alcohol bottle,
or when the beating began?
Or could it have been,
That knife in that drawer
To end it all fast
but with friction and gore
It’s not the cause
that we need to know
for only a short time
will the answer be so
but the reason behind it,
well that’s something else
something to stay up late for
to think on and dwell
Copyright ©
spazz911
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2005-04-08 22:49:36]
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Re: No one cares
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by blue_angel on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 10:57:47 PM AEST
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heylo... great poem, one of my faves of yers. well written ive read it so many times already hehe.
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Re: No one cares
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by ForeverAlone on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 11:01:01 PM AEST
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Ah...well...There are some good lines in this...not really somthing thats original, but still pretty good none the less..
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Re: No one cares
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by TheVoice on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 11:19:45 PM AEST
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I enjoyed the write. there are those who do care though. many sleepless nights, many soaked shoulders from crying eyes, many bruises from released angers. never give up the faith, there are those who do care.
The Voice
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Re: No one cares
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by Kevin on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 01:58:22 AM AEST
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Great poem, i really enjoyed it a lot. It's very said, yet very compelling. Just keep ur head up, things'll get better, sometimes all u need is a good nights sleep.
-Kevin |
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Re: No one cares
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by sick_n_twisted on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 02:29:22 AM AEST
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| good poem great flow so not boring wide awake during the whole thing really sad im sorry if its true |
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Re: No one cares
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by pixie on
Saturday, 9th April 2005 @ 01:18:05 PM AEST
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people DO care, a very sad write. you have expressed your feelings well,
pix xx |
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Re: No one cares
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by NightOwl on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 10:57:19 AM AEST
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Awesome poem... we DO care! And you have amazing talent! We've all been in the ruts where no one seems to care, but even if no one does, God is there.
If you ever need to spill...
*~Erin~* |
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