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Spit on your escape
Contributed by
Heartfilledblood
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Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 02:13:55 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Suck it all as you watch him fall
Take it in as you commit your sin
Now smile there while you know your vile
And spit upon the one undone
Trying so hard to keep it sane
ALways yearning to relive this pain
SO slap him hard with lies of love
For all he wants is to be free like the doves
So suck it all as you watch him fall
Take it in as you commit your sin
Please smile while you know your vile
And spit upon the one now done
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Heartfilledblood
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2005-04-06 14:13:55]
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Re: Spit on your escape
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by Arsenic on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 02:15:47 PM AEST
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Wow, that was written with passion! Good emotion, like it was spit out in a rage.
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Re: Spit on your escape
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 02:41:51 PM AEST
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Yeah, this seems rather angry.
I like it, but I think it would look great with another stanza, too.
This is a good write,
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Re: Spit on your escape
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by Pyrofungus on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 07:48:09 PM AEST
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I haven't read one of yours in awhile...such anger dear...smile...you've done well.
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