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IT-part 9-Give up *plz comment?*
Contributed by
mishy
on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 11:52:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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You're drowning in this ocean of maddness
Surrounded by an enviroment of saddness
IT has cornered you and made you cry
IT made you wish that you would die
But you still hold on, why do you fight?
Why not give up? It's not wrong or right
IT makes the tears stream down your face
IT makes you long to leave this horrid place
You know you want to cut deeper then you do
Why not do it? End it... Cut all the way through
Better yet, hold the razor up to your throat
Then up to heaven, your soul will float
IT has done all this to your mind
Its a constant battle, IT aint kind
Just give up, who cares if IT wants that?
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mishy
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2005-04-06 11:52:16] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: IT-part 9-Give up *plz comment?*
(User Rating: 1 ) by sick_n_twisted on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 12:07:19 PM AEST (User
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nice write,,,i really liked it nice idea about IT whats it?? i like this poem cause it has a good flow you rhymed all the way through and there good rhymes too i liked this one: You know you want to cut deeper then you do
Why not do it? End it... Cut all the way through
Better yet, hold the razor up to your throat
Then up to heaven, your soul will float but i dont belive your soul goes to heaven if you kill urself aside from that i really like your poem thanks for reading my comment,Denise
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