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Therapy
Contributed by
fielding88
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Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 03:18:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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What makes you laugh?
What makes you smile?
I’m willing to listen,
Sit down for a while.
Drop the pen and paper you hold.
For while they make you wiser,
They make you cold.
Use words instead.
Use them on me.
Ill stay out of your head,
Tell me what to see.
I’m no therapist, but I can tell
Writing down your thoughts
only makes them swell.
What makes you tick?
What makes you sad?
Just let me know,
It wont be as bad.
Moderate writing, don’t let it consume.
For if you don’t speak,
Your thoughts can’t bloom.
I’ve sat here with you,
Hanging to your every word.
Never once critiquing
The sadness that I heard.
You want to repay me,
Only praising my name.
I’d ask for nothing more
Than if you did the same.
Copyright ©
fielding88
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2005-04-04 15:18:00]
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Re: Therapy
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 03:34:10 PM AEST
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| This is wonderful. I can my step-father saying something like this, not that it's wrong... Very nice write. |
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Re: Therapy
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by Archie on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 03:53:40 PM AEST
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| Great poem. I understand and will reciprocate. |
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Re: Therapy
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 04:11:15 PM AEST
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Marc i liked this a lot, it's very well writen.
What makes you laugh?
What makes you smile?
I’m willing to listen,
Sit down for a while.
Drop the pen and paper you hold.
For while they make you wiser,
They make you cold.
I love that stanza the best.
Jane
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Re: Therapy
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by allymp on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 04:24:26 PM AEST
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| theres a lot i can say about this poem but sadly i have to get going...just wanted to tell you you did good with it though |
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Re: Therapy
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 05:16:38 PM AEST
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Great flow and filled with simple wisdom.
( I think thats the best kind!)
Awsome job! |
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Re: Therapy
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by breny on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 06:39:22 PM AEST
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oh marc this is so good.
its from the heart and straight to the point and it is just really good!
Sorry there isn't more that I can say except.....
Great Write!
~Brenna~ |
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Re: Therapy
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by pixie on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 08:08:12 AM AEST
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a very clever and creative write,
pix xx |
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Re: Therapy
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 05:17:23 PM AEST
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Hear hear! I admire and agree with what was said in this piece.
Drop the pen and paper you hold.
For while they make you wiser,
They make you cold.
I like the way this was put. Also the ending,
I’d ask for nothing more
Than if you did the same.
Well spoken! Keep it up.
Andrew |
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Re: Therapy
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by freckle on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 07:46:12 PM AEST
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Great poem. I really liked this one alot. Too often, there is no one to just sit and listen....I really liked this poem!
Carol |
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Re: Therapy
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by xXcrossedXx on
Wednesday, 22nd June 2005 @ 06:46:35 AM AEST
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Oh Marc! WOW. This was phenominal my new favorite.. for a couple reasons:
1. This relates so much to me, I can be on other end but I'm more on the end of who you're writing about.
2. The structure/format was beautiful I really liked the two questions in the first and third stanzas.
3. It's just brilliant.. you know those poems that are written so good it just takes your breath away? That's what you've done here and I had to wait a minute before I commented so I could pick apart the pieces, this is wonderful deffinately my favorite of yours! (until I read the next one).
Don't throw away your talent!
--amanda-- |
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