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Earth’s Symphony
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 12:20:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I could have danced to the way the wind blows,
In the ups and downs of the music it creates,
Like a flute in the silence of a clearing,
Like the sound of the reeds in the lakes.
While the leaves played a rustled accompaniment,
To the staccato applause from the grass,
And the bee's almost buzzed for an encore,
Fearing to believe that the moment had passed.
And the sun would bless us with it's spotlight,
While the birds sang the chorus to the sky,
And the clouds would close over like a curtain,
As the day quietly sung it's goodbyes.
Then the night would sneak in silently,
Unwilling to interupt the song,
But quieting the music with it's presence,
As if to make a noise would somehow be wrong,
And the trees would shuffle in comfort,
Composing a lullaby to set the world to sleep,
While an owl would put voice to the moonlight,
For a silent watch it would silently keep.
Till the moon would sink low on the horizon,
Waiting for a spotlight to take its place,
To wake morning up with a production,
Unseen by the human race.
[And the stage is always set in the nightime,
While life aways takes place in the day,
The music will carry on; nature's listening,
In its own very special way.
While the birds sing their song every morning,
And the moon stands guard every night,
In a play of the seasons and magic,
There for nature's every delight.]
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by pixie on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 12:40:54 PM AEST
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that was beautifully composed Philly, really it was amazing and I am going to read it again lol
take care
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Willofree on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 12:53:55 PM AEST
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This is absolutely beautiful. The rhythum and flow is a song, danced to the rendition of nature. As it is nature that provides the melody. This lead me to toss out Natures' Melody as another possible title to wonderful poem....or Wind Song
Well done! Fantastic write
Willofree
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by xtremcalibur on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 12:56:59 PM AEST
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| The Song seems to be appropriate for this piece. Loved the style of your write. It is light-hearted and I enjoyed reading it. |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 01:24:48 PM AEST
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| Wow How apropriate for nature, which is truely a soong! You have done it justice. The title is fine as is, but if it bothers you that much, then perhaps..Natures' Song? |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 02:09:32 PM AEST
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A beautful write phill dreamlike and sensitive
as for the help, RIGHT, LIKE I NEED GUITAR
LESSONS, LOL . . . BRILLIANT AS ALWAYS
QUITE ENJOYABLE I MIGHT ADD . . . now go
write another work of art . . .
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Kie on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 02:24:08 PM AEST
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This was beautiful and harmonious.
I could think of a zillion titles.
"Wind Dances"
"A Chorus To The Sky"
"A Lullaby's Composition"
"Play Of Seasons"
I could go on....
Great poem.
Kie |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 04:28:06 PM AEST
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That was just beautiful Phil.
I just love the way you composed this.
Very well done indeed.
Jane |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 07:10:22 PM AEST
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| Such vibrante images, every thought, sound,a dn feeing discribed in supurb detail, I think it's safe to say that you've done it again! |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by hooray_its_jen on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 07:29:37 PM AEST
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ooohh my gosh Phil.
....The image in my mind could be put on a postcard, it is really that beautiful. I should paint it while it's still lingering there....
That is the most calming thing I have read in a looong time. Thank you. It was wonderful.
Love, Jenna |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Kie-Kie on
Wednesday, 6th April 2005 @ 06:06:35 PM AEST
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Wow it really put me in touch with the world around me... this is a great write Phil :D
***** 5 stars *****
Love ya,
~Kiela~ |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Archie on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 05:18:15 AM AEST
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| This is good. You are a very adept writer. I write a lot of nature poetry and this is one of the better ones I have read. |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 06:22:34 PM AEST
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Wow, Phil. I think you might understand how much I love good nature poetry (something to do with the fact that nature has made an appearance in, I think, every one of my poems posted here). This is exquisite, extraordinary. The language is beautiful, and the imagery stunning.
I can't single out anything, for it all flows too well.
Bravo! my friend.
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Spike on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 04:48:50 AM AEST
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I enjoyed this piece. Personally, I'd tighten it up a bit to keep the tempo you established in the opening lines going - but, it's your creation, and I applaud you.
Spike |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 12:41:58 PM AEST
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| Wow Phil! This was so beautiful! It just had the most perfect imagery. Vivid and descriptive! I can't add much more to what everyone has already said here, but I think you deserve a standing ovation for this one! ~joni~ |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 29th April 2005 @ 10:12:21 AM AEST
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A vivid write.
Dreamy and creative...
There is a fantastic rhyme scheme, to follow a perfect flow...from visualisation to the next...
And what beautiful pictures you paint with your humble words.
I love it, Phil. ox |
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Re: Earth’s Symphony
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 10th March 2009 @ 12:20:26 AM AEST
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I could feel myself drifting wistfully through your grand imagery. This was seriously, to coin a phrase, like a breath of fresh air and that is not easily found these days. But in this.... it was there and much more!!!
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