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Window of Survival
Contributed by
Crimson_Valley
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Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:01:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Window of Survival
I gave you all that I could.
Helped you to my extent.
The harder I try the harder I fail.
All I ever asked for is consideration.
The anger released was misunderstood.
Everything you ever did deserved it.
The world drives me insane.
All you have done for me.
All the improvement I’ve undergone.
But all that’s been unknotted.
Highly evolved I have become.
Anger controls me.
Love consumes me.
In the time of my downs you rejected me.
During the times of your blues I was there.
This relationship was just fake.
I knew it, how could I trust you?
Suppressing my confidence.
Memories come back to torment me.
Menacing figures come to life.
My life is now worse than it used to be.
For mistakes I make will be the death of me.
Among the paths of death I walk,
waiting the for the end to come.
Please don’t look back,
Just go on without me.
Another person gone past in my life.
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Re: Window of Survival
(User Rating: 1 ) by xtremcalibur on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 01:13:42 PM AEST (User
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I see a beautiful write. I think if you would give it a little bit rewording, it would be excellent. It has all the right elements within it, but it needs a little restructure. I liked it, I might add. But I can put myself into a write and walk through it as the words flow. One should have been so lucky to have had you. Some people do not appreciate. Good write |
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