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like a balloon
Contributed by
heartwaypastbeating
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Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 02:41:16 AM in AEST
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I want to attach you
like a balloon to my wrist
so you will never float away
I want to wrap you in elastic
like paper in a rubberband
so we will always be together
I want to stamp you
like luggage in an airport
so you will always return to me
but you are so elusive
like a perfect sky
or a warm rain
There Is No Happy Ending
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heartwaypastbeating
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2005-04-02 02:41:16]
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Re: like a balloon
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 08:15:48 AM AEST
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I don't like this as much as the last two I commented on.
But I still love it, it captures the feeling well, I think.
I think many of us have felt this.
Great write,
Phil |
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Re: like a balloon
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by Stranger on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 08:18:21 PM AEST
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| Why would you want to attach him/her to your wrist like a ballon? Do not ballons eventually run out of air and die? Unless that's what you mean by no happy ending, and if that's the case, well done. |
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Re: like a balloon
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Monday, 8th August 2005 @ 11:57:34 AM AEST
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| Yeah... I somewhat agree with Stranger on this one. The balloon being tied to the wrist is a little different only because ballons don't last forever. I think you were just using it as a comparison for when the ballon is attached to you... it can't come off. You weren't comparing the person to the "dying ballon". You were more comparing it to the string of the balloon. Anyways, I do know how you feel in this write. Many go through this. Sorry for your pain... |
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