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Help Me Please
Contributed by
Live2Die
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Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 12:04:25 AM in AEST
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Lights gone out,
Life slipping by,
Help me please.
On the ground,
Room spinning,
Help me please.
Back arching,
Throat tearing,
Help me please.
Tears pouring,
Blood streaming,
Help me please.
Watching you,
Hating you,
Help me please.
Dying here,
Blaming you,
‘cause now I’m dead.
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Live2Die
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2005-04-01 00:04:25]
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Re: Help Me Please
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by brokengirl on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 12:33:41 AM AEST
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WOW...powerful poem. really good..i like it. hope u get the help ur asking for......
-hailey |
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Re: Help Me Please
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by Naveen on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 07:05:49 AM AEST
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| Thats great one , but how can I help u |
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Re: Help Me Please
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by In_a_while on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 07:59:38 AM AEST
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| very strong message, "back arching, throat tearing" oooo we're talking goosebumps here. Keep up the edgy work! |
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Re: Help Me Please
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by pixie on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 08:03:07 AM AEST
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a very powerful write. deeply sad and emotional,
pix xx |
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Re: Help Me Please
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by high_on_duct_tape on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 06:56:52 PM AEST
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I agree, this is one f ur better ones. The pictures are just great, "Tears pouring,
Blood streaming," is a great line! great write here - Solomon |
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Re: Help Me Please
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 05:06:08 AM AEST
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This was a interesting write but I am not sure where you were going with it. The end almost came to soon. At first I thought of a Soldier in battle then an old persons last thoughts before passing ." Dying here,....
Blaming WHO coz now I'm dead. " I am curious who/what are you writing about .
Whisper |
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Re: Help Me Please
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by rikkijade on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 04:04:14 PM AEST
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| Not really sure whta kind of situation makexs you write poetry like these, but it is short and has lots of feelings |
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