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My Love
Contributed by
essentially9
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Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 10:09:59 PM in AEST
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My Love
My heart hardens with every breakage.
The fragments are glued together with hate.
The love that was held wasn't even sacred.
It was tainted by lust and pain.
The pen writes every thought and feeling
With the silhouettes of my hand leaving
Shadings and smudges of ink and blood
Over each line that wasn't brilliant enough.
The love I had brought me crashing down
When I thought I could only go higher.
I cannot leave the ground,
Even though I still feel love's fire.
Yet, all my love for writing
Is now dwindling.
I could never attain my expectation,
Because I have lost all passion to perfection.
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essentially9
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Re: My Love
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by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 10:19:32 PM AEST
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Yeah um Jen...You stole my title...I just used that one....Grrr..lol..But jen if you really think you have lost perfection.....You might want to read this poem....Because you write perfection of your own...And nobody and nothing can ever take that from you Jen...Never stop writing, I hope you are well
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Re: My Love
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by TheVoice on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 10:22:58 PM AEST
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Such a strong feeling of defeat. NEVER give up. Some of my best pieces are from when I thought I was at my lowest points.
Thoughts are with you.
The Voice
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Re: My Love
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by Ravensfire on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 10:36:48 PM AEST
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| I must say, the way you use words to express such emotion, such pain, keeps me in awe of your poetry. Simply outstanding. Thank you ! |
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Re: My Love
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by DorianChambers on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 11:28:12 PM AEST
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UR A BEAUTIFUL WRITTER OF POETRY
WRITE 4 THE SAKE OF LOVE IT SELF, THE
FEELINGS U EXPRESS R OF A HURTING
HEART, BUT IN ISELF THE HEART IS IT'S
OWN BEST INSPERATION, LET NO ONE
DETERMINE YOUR DESTINY BUT THAT
WHAT U FEEL IN YOUR HEART, 4 YOUR
HEART IS YOURS AND YOURS ALONE . . .
DORIAN CHAMBERS |
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Re: My Love
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 01:35:04 AM AEST
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wow jen this is beautiful.. I love the way you write.. its so very youish as I say.. don't stop writing.. never lose that spark of writing your awesome at it
JENNI |
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Re: My Love
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by venkat on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 06:33:39 AM AEST
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| it is expressed with such a pain asif one has a shot through heart...sadness spills in each line..:-) venkat |
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Re: My Love
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by pixie on
Friday, 1st April 2005 @ 08:04:10 AM AEST
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powerful and written expertly,
pix xx |
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Re: My Love
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 08:39:07 PM AEST
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What an amazing love poem you have here. ; ) Then again, it's probably not necessarily a love poem, because you had something a lot better to say. This has been written to a perfection that i rarely see these days, because it seems like you covered stray avenues quite nicely by the time you concluded your poem. Again, i loved this conclusion like all your others. There's a plain sense of defeat that comes shining through with your conclusion.
If your writing dwindles, i dunno....i don't think i'll ever find anything that tastes the same : P keep writing beautiful pieces like this one! |
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