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Him
Contributed by
Rogue
on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 09:27:10 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The way he captured my heart
the one whom after school I could not part
A handsome face which was his
laying next to me I wish he were
On my shoulder I let him cry
the first love of mine
That arguement two weeks ago crossed my mind
I tried to end on good terms
I don't blame him for not being kind
I should have went after him that night
but I didn't want to start another fight
Who knew it'd be the last time I'd see him
the last time I'd hear his voice
the last time I held him
the last time I kissed him
the last words...I'd speak to him
Looking even more handsome there he ly
I never even got the chance to say good-bye
Copyright ©
Rogue
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2005-03-30 09:27:10]
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Re: Him
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 09:36:55 AM AEST
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What a fantastic write, some parts of the poem did not rhyme but it didnt matter. You got you're message across and it was good.
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Re: Him
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by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 09:49:19 AM AEST
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| Very emotional and strong. I could feel the loss that the story evokes. Good job. Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Him
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by guts_n_glitter on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 01:10:33 PM AEST
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good write
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Re: Him
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by Sinned on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 09:47:39 PM AEST
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Rogue
Now this is a poem; very good--could have rymed better in a few spots,but extreemly good.
Painfuly,sad
Keep it up.I hope it is a made up story,but if not my condolences.
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