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~SUE~
Contributed by
inoc
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Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 05:49:59 AM in AEST
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I have been waiting each day,
for the Sargent to say,
that Sue my daughter,
is no longer missing near water.
What a long week,
the Sargent said they seek.
But each day looks worse.
I sit in my chair and curse.
I hear a bang,
my heart it sang!
As I hug her and chat about things,
together again but suddenly it -rings...
When I pick up the phone.
-I realise I was alone-.
In suspence, Sargent did tell.
"They found Sue she"s doing so well."
We're coming home now, to bring her home...
In shock, I'm in bed I moan.
With another policeman beside,
he tells me "Sargent and Sue died".
He trys to resusitate me,
but I desire to be with Sue- finally.
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Re: ~SUE~
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by mina-1 on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 07:25:22 AM AEST
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A sad, emotional and heart touching write.
A desire to be with the one u love only to be told they are no longer. I hope all is well my friend. Otherwise a truly touching poem.
Hugs,
Sue |
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Re: ~SUE~
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by greyshadow on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 07:33:15 AM AEST
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| It seems like there is a lot of emotion behind this poem. I could feel your pain but the tone seemed a bit matter of fact to me, i would have been pulled in more had you added more emotion. Great poem though. |
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Re: ~SUE~
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by bernard on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 03:00:20 AM AEST
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| This poem is very sad my Friend I hope it was not written from experience. Keep smiling from bernard. |
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Re: ~SUE~
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by sandysandysandy on
Monday, 18th April 2005 @ 09:16:34 AM AEST
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| well my goodness. you got me on the edge of my seat and hoping for the sue to be fine and then you grabbed me and told me she is dead. made me mad that she died. Is this true your daughter.. I hope not. hug .. you sure know how to write.. |
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