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dont let me fall
Contributed by
brokengirl
on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 12:08:21 AM in AEST
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I thought I would never love anyone
Until I met you
You can always make me laugh
Even when I really don’t want to
Everyone says I’m crazy
But I can’t help the way I feel
Do you feel the same way?
Or am I just dreaming?
Can this ever happen?
Because I really want it to
I shouldn’t bring you into my life
I don’t want to hurt you
But I just want you so bad.
I’ve already fallen for you once
But you didn’t pick me up
I finally got up on my own
Just so I can fall for you again
Will you catch me this time?
And take me in your arms forever?
Or let me fall again?
I just want us to be together
Because I cant live without you
I think I love you
Yes, I love you.
Copyright ©
brokengirl
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2005-03-30 00:08:21]
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Re: dont let me fall
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by ForeverAlone on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 01:17:40 AM AEST
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Hmmm...Great poem...don't be hard on yourself...And I hope all comes well for you.
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Re: dont let me fall
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by iodinelove on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 02:00:03 AM AEST
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Word choice.
It's what you need to practice more. Read what you write out loud. Listen to the way it sounds. Anybody can write line after line. Anybody. But what makes it good is the way it reads, the sound it makes. Pick up a copy of walt whitman's blades of grass(song of my self) or The outlaw bible of american poetry. Read patti smith, or dh levy. They use the form your using. Not many people use it here...most people rhyme(bloody rhymes)
you have potential...just read and practice.
always, abraham |
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Re: dont let me fall
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by THUGGIN4REAL on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 04:05:35 PM AEST
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| good write , let everything come from your heart, thats true poetry , not how you spell it. good write |
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Re: dont let me fall
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 05:57:37 PM AEST
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I don't think there would anyone who couldn't in some way relate to these words.
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Re: dont let me fall
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by Stonedraider23 on
Sunday, 10th April 2005 @ 11:31:32 PM AEST
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| good write great poem hmmm it was beautiful umm i loved it lets see it was sexy n a typed way lol yea im dumb great write i liked it alot keep it up |
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Re: dont let me fall
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 03:03:18 AM AEST
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I hope you were caught. Well done. It did seem like it needed to be, I don't know, retouched a bit, but it was good.
Take care.
David |
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