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Out of Control
Contributed by
Vistar
on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 09:55:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Why do these things happen
Always right in front of me
What? and Why? run through my head
How come I didn't see?
I feel like I'm so powerless
My life's out of control
I made a single bad mistake
The rest of time's the toll
An instant changes everything
Like sunshine turned to rain
My life went down the drain
And now
It's only filled with pain
I'm on my own side
No one's there
I'm all alone
And I don't care.
Copyright ©
Vistar
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2005-03-29 21:55:14]
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Re: Out of Control
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 09:59:51 PM AEST
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hang tuff, my friend you'll get thru. We all loose control at times as we're only human.
good work.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Out of Control
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by Stellar on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 10:05:28 PM AEST
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Helplessness is one of the worst things to feel. We've all been there and we wonder how it'll ever stop, but somehow it always does.
Great poem. I like how the lines in the last stanza were very short and to the point.
It captured your feelings well.
Take care ~Stellar |
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Re: Out of Control
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by Jyssvw on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 10:07:56 PM AEST
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| enjoyed would be a bad word- nice job |
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Re: Out of Control
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by Faust on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 07:39:22 AM AEST
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| Alot of times one mistake can ruin you. Trust me i've had plenty of them. |
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Re: Out of Control
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by jeza on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 10:41:26 PM AEST
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these feeling suk but we all lose control sometimes there is nothing we can do about it until you feel better hang in there and be brave
jeza |
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Re: Out of Control
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by Moshi_Moshi on
Tuesday, 5th April 2005 @ 06:29:18 PM AEST
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| We all lose control and make mistakes at times but if you didn't do that how could you learn, right? And besides some of my best meriories is when I lost control and made mistakes. |
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