|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
She Shot Him Down
Contributed by
Greenlee
on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 02:25:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
|
I watched her break his heart last year
When she told him he wasn't good enough
Before she went after his best friend.
I watched her laugh at him when he didn't understand
Because that's what you do when someone loves you.
You lead them on and then ruin them.
Yesterday she apologized
And he believed her right away
I told him not to be foolish
But he had been waiting for her all of this time.
He told her that he loved her
But she said she wasn't sure.
He promised her the world and everything she wanted
Because even though she shot him down
He couldn't picture life without her.
Yesterday he called me
He told me things were never fair.
She finally wanted him
And he was finally hers.
He told me that he was sorry.
Then he hung up the phone.
Because when you're actually wanted
Someone has to be left alone.
Copyright ©
Greenlee
... [
2005-03-29 14:25:50]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: She Shot Him Down
(User Rating: 1 )
by glu1 on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 02:33:31 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| powerful ending. a fitting and insightful conclusion |
|
|
Re: She Shot Him Down
(User Rating: 1 )
by xrockstheheart on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 02:50:05 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| hola, i have an idea and have posted it on the forum. so you are the poem next to mine. I like your theme, but the poetics need work, maybe we should call it prose in the intro. i will think on this. |
|
|
Re: She Shot Him Down
(User Rating: 1 )
by lilikat on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 03:06:43 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| I liked it. It might need a little bit more of a flow, but I thought it was very good. |
|
|
Re: She Shot Him Down
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 05:25:25 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| has a lot of potential. good ending. |
|
|
Re: She Shot Him Down
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 06:02:21 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Wow...I loved the ending so much! I really like your sytle of writing. I truly look forward to reading more of your work soon. Great job! :-) |
|
|
Re: She Shot Him Down
(User Rating: 1 )
by THUGGIN4REAL on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 04:49:10 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| very nice. this happens to the best of us, but do you know what sucks? is that after you have been played like a fool, you close up and the heart that once beat now has a flatline |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
