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Horrible Place
Contributed by
Les4567
on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 10:27:41 PM in AEST
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MiscPoems
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Shrieks of horror
Fill the old house
Stinging memories haunt
Shadows of moths
Decorate the walls
The unpeaceful souls
Wander aimlessly
This old house is settled
Yet the walls still creek
A cold breeze sets in
No one is home
It is a vacant
Place were unrested
Spirits pace
The vicinity that
I speak of
Is the depths
Of my forsaken
Mind
Copyright ©
Les4567
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2005-03-28 22:27:41]
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Re: Horrible Place
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 10:34:11 PM AEST
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Nice peice of simple poetry set's a mood 4
an inward journey . . .
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Re: Horrible Place
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by shelby on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 10:44:19 PM AEST
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nice twist at the end I was visioning an old house that sat vacant then the end came I love it!
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Re: Horrible Place
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by Rxqueen on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 04:31:54 AM AEST
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| liked how you dragged me in untillthe end where it was a complete twist. Great descriptions. I liked it, pretty eerie. I wouldn't change it. |
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Re: Horrible Place
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 09:58:14 AM AEST
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Wow..I really love the twist at the end, I didn't expect that at all.
I wouldn't really change anything about this. It's just a good write.
Keep it up,
Phil |
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Re: Horrible Place
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by mina-1 on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 04:50:03 PM AEST
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wow I loved the twist at the end. No need to change anything with your poem. This is an absolutely great piece of poetry my friend.
Keep up the brillant work.
Hugs,
Sue |
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