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The Story of a Man
Contributed by
breny
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Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 06:23:20 PM in AEST
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The story of a man
who's heart has a crack
He gave all his love
to get nothing back
This love that he cherished
was doomed to fail
There was no way to get it
he just couldn't prevail
His love for her ran deep
as pure as love can be
She loved him the same
but this love just couldn't be
The woman has a boy
And she must do what's right for him
even if it causes
her life to be grim
So now they live their lives
and everyday they wonder
about what could have been
if their love had not been hindered
Copyright ©
breny
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2005-03-28 18:23:20]
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by hoist1atca on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 07:00:01 PM AEST
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A very sad tale- yet captured so well by you...
If this love was real then it will prevail over time and trial...
There is no stronger force known to man than true love...
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by xxbreathlessx on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 09:55:26 PM AEST
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| i agree, a sad tale indeed. i like the way you rhyme and tell the story delicatly and keep it to the point |
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 11:02:07 PM AEST
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As beautiful as ever bren, touches the heart
of the lonely . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 08:39:50 AM AEST
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I like this, sad, and straight to the point, but in a good way.
There is a lot of meaning behind this, and a definate moral behind it.
Good write Brenna,
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by mylady on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 12:21:58 PM AEST
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| It very nice .. |
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 02:05:18 PM AEST
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a sad yet heartfelt story - excellently conscrewed and well put together...
superb work |
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Re: The Story of a Man
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 05:22:52 PM AEST
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| This was so universal, i know personally, I can relate to aspects of it. You really demonstrate your talent in poetry like this, you have a knack for writing very personal stuff that is just so easily relatable. Again, this was a great write. |
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