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Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
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Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 06:31:46 PM in AEST
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Don't take your hand from my shoulder
I want to dance and spin until
You can't see and fall into me
As the melody progresses and the ghost-notes come
From hollow amplifiers in the vanity of this
Romantic balance, swaying along the edge of
Nothing on which the ballad that is your smile
Is my life...Don't slip now, not from me
Slam the shutters down and peek through the cracks
And watch me hang my heart with last weeks laundry
Just watch me, I'll dance over your thoughts and
You'll have no choice but to dream of me
This is how I'd like things to turn out: You and I
Dancing, my hands around your hips and your fingers laced
Along the nape of my neck. I don't want things to end
If this dance was to cease, my expressionless eyes would have
None to gaze into. Would you feel the same?
Give me your hand, so you can spin in a slow mournful pirouette
Turn around and look into my eyes...Now close yours and see
Me smiling at your, as once I never could
My turn to take a bow and when, again, our eyes meet, I wonder
Why is your mascara running? Why must you throw tears into this
Balance of romantic, harmonious deathwishes?
Can I taste your tears? Before you walk away
Give me the chance to steal your heart again
I swear I'm not the person which I'm so elegantly percieved
I breath, and I promise there is blood in these wasting veins
As I paused your eyes fluttered and closed, kissed my cheek and
A hand fell from my shoulder...You looked so majestic walking
From me...and with each and every echoing step, the volume through
Hollow amplifiers fades...I crash to the floor as did your tears
And through my sobs I did not notice the melody is back and
The pressure of your hand was back on my shoulder
You stepped away and let me rise and as I stood, the music
Paused
Can I have your hand? You just smiled and instantly you were
At my side, but you insisted to mourn for my shattered heart as
We danced
Tears disrupted your blackened lashes, to stain your cheeks of midnight
While my lips caught your liquid depression as they brushed yours
Will you not kiss me? Will you not stain my face with
The black on your lined eyes?
Would you at least stop crying over me
Kneeling now, because standing made my stomach turn. You fell backward
And as I cried and mourned for your full-of-life form, I couldn't
Help but notice that your eyes gazed past mine
To the ceiling with blank stares, and I cried one last tear
As your now-expressionless eyes were no longer mine
Copyright ©
eyesxcriedxout1989
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2005-03-27 18:31:46]
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 06:39:21 PM AEST
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| i loved it ........wish i could write something this good in six minutes!!!!! |
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by Eterno_Vittima on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 06:50:51 PM AEST
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| wow...that was amazing, great emotion, good write! |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by Gothchyk on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 02:47:59 AM AEST
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| I agree w/ the others, an amazing write, you have great talent to write something like this in only six mins. Wonderful imagery in it as well, i could see them dancing and weeping on the floor. Great write. |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 10:08:18 PM AEST
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What is with all these ghost referrences lately?
You're a very talented guy, Mason.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 09:11:25 AM AEST
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*shock* 6 minutes? Sheesh. I would I could write like this in 6 minutes. What a poem.
I agree with Ghosty, you have some talent, my friend.
This is fantastic, and the images are almost overwhelming.
Great write,
Phil |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by Nazmythian on
Saturday, 2nd April 2005 @ 12:30:06 AM AEST
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I have been away from your page for far too long. Damn what a write ... I loved this line "...And watch me hang my heart with last weeks laundry... " that was just ... wow !!! Kudos Mason !!! You done good !!!
Nazmythian ~ |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 7th April 2005 @ 06:26:57 AM AEST
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I am entirely swooned by this romantic elegy…
And what beautiful imagery you illustrate, Mason.
Lascivious in every facet and dark like hollow voids.
A truly dark and emotive write.
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by EmoDCgirl36 on
Friday, 22nd April 2005 @ 08:44:16 PM AEST
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| Dude your writing is like number one compared to mine. Gosh you're terribly skilled with your writing. It's wonderful. |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by emocutie07 on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 10:08:30 PM AEST
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I've read this a countless number of times..and yet it still tugs at my heart in just so many ways..Oh mason you are possibly the most talented/ahmazing person I have ever met..
Love,love,love you
x3- C |
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Re: Deathwish: A Midnight Romance
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 15th November 2014 @ 12:02:35 AM AEST
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| I definitely dug it my cuz. this is a great write and displays your many giftings with words and structure. the timbre here is perfect. you always knew how to tell a story |
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