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Hated Reflection
Contributed by
essentially9
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Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 10:03:02 PM in AEST
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Hated Reflection
I'm completely filled with hate,
And it suffocates my heart.
Your love slowly takes
Its toll and tears it apart.
I break the reflection
That you used to be.
I break everything
That you took from me.
I break the reflection
Of pure imperfection
That you've become to be.
I break you like you broke me.
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by Les4567 on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 10:09:37 PM AEST
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I liked this one Jen. It was short, simple, and very much to the point. You have such a way with words. I especially like the last part of it
"I break the reflection
Of pure imperfection
That you've become to be.
I break you like you broke me."
Good write. Never stop!
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by ForeverAlone on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 10:14:48 PM AEST
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This is simple perfect Jen....I loved the entire thing. Great rythem and ryhme...Awesome topic and well writen....But this is your norm....And that is what I have come to expect.....Great job Jen
Clark =] |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 10:18:43 PM AEST
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Its kinda sad and i can feel you pain.
It ryhmes really really well.I like this piece alot.
well done. |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by TheVoice on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 11:07:00 PM AEST
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Seeing the problem, Knowing the direction for making a change, Taking the stand. Excellent write. Sad situation, support is there.
The Voice
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by mina-1 on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 12:57:17 AM AEST
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a very sad, but very well written poem, Jen.
Short and to the point. An excellent write from such a talented poetess. Well done.
Hugs,
Sue |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 01:20:56 AM AEST
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Wow!
Heartbreaking, but so powerful, especially the last stanza.
Brilliant write. |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by Rxqueen on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 01:21:19 AM AEST
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"I break the reflection
Of pure imperfection"
That was probably my favorite line. This was a simple peice, yet had much packed betwean the lines. Many can relate to this feeling. You put a powerful feeling in 3 stanzas, that is strength. And god knows how many times I have stood in front of the mirror and done the same thing. However mirrors are hard to break, lol, and I usually end up with a hurt fist...
"I break the reflection
That you used to be."
These lines are suggesting that you have become someone you hate, and no longer know who you are. I could be wrong. That is the thing about poetry analysis, you never really know what is in the writers head. But for me that is what you were saying because that is what I can feel. I liked this peice. It is your own personal story yet it is the same for many. Loves it. *hope I didn't ramble too much*
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by white_tiger on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 01:56:40 AM AEST
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i love this poem. even though itsonly 3 stanzas long, it has so much meaning weaved into it. i know there are so many days when i look at myself in the mirror, thinkning exactly the same thing. u have captured the feelings so perfectly
great writing and keep smilng
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by SimplyMe on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 03:13:50 AM AEST
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You said so much with such little words. I can definately relate to this. There are days i can't NOT stand who i'm looking at in the mirror. I stand in front of it for hours just trying to find something wrong. Truth is though, we are all beautiful in our own way. Even if it's through talent. From this poem comes so much talent. So i can just imagine the beauty of it's Publisher. Wonderful write. Much love.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by pixie on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 10:56:28 AM AEST
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deep and perfectly written,
pix xx |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by Gothchyk on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 11:31:27 AM AEST
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| great write. |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 01:17:48 PM AEST
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I like this very very much, and an undertsnad and relate, too.
Um, one thing though, you use 'Break' a lot in this and it makes is a slight bit repetetive.
That's the only thing I can see, really.
You have said lots s a few words, and I love that.
Great write hun,
You are becoming one of my favourites.
*hugs tons* Phil xxx |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by Willofree on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 05:58:31 PM AEST
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Excellent poem, but quite sad with a lot of pain expressed. Probably difficult to write, but I'm glad you reached out to share this write.
Succinct and to the point, alot covered. You certainly covered the essence of it.
Great write
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by DorianChambers on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 11:22:00 PM AEST
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An emotional peice of writting that reaches out through the screen . . .
Dorian Chambers |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 05:16:20 PM AEST
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| Deep and emotional. Wonderfully expressed. |
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Re: Hated Reflection
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by venkat on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 01:10:01 AM AEST
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Aaah..aah..better you break and forget hate..love this write... a friendly hug :-)
venkat |
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