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-Forsaken eyes-
Contributed by
kittie30
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Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 08:29:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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-Forsaken Eyes-
I never would have left if I had seen it coming,
If all there was is regret and sorrow to come,
I didn’t know where I was going,
My world is upside down.
The darkest clouds I’ve ever seen are heading right for me.
I happen to see a friend sitting next to me,
All as silent as could be,
Then found something along the way,
Its called trust
I don’t know why but it haunted me all night long.
And that’s why
I have
-Forsaken Eyes-
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kittie30
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2005-03-24 20:29:01]
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Re: -Forsaken eyes-
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by blue_angel on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 08:58:24 PM AEST
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| I think its good... it has an emotion that a lot of people share. It captures what seems almost like fear, regret is most definite. Yet, I'm not quite sure of what you're trying to say here. Help me out? I think it's based on feeling and emotion and that's always good. Although I don't mean to assume things, I'm only commenting from my point of veiw. |
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Re: -Forsaken eyes-
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by THUGGIN4REAL on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 05:08:22 PM AEST
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| good write,go into more detail next time,express your talent,tell you story |
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