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The War of Time
Contributed by
freckle
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Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 08:11:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The War of Time
Ground upon the stones of time
My spirit lifts again
It wraps itself in linens soft
My body's, not it's friend
My spirit is as old as life
as young as morning dew
My spirt wants to romp and play
My body, rest, anew
My spirit and my body
a war without a word
They wage against each other
Yet not a sound is heard
My spirit is more
a friend to me
My body more
an enemy
The sand of time
flows quickly by
My spirit stands firm
Yet, my body will die.
Carol
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Re: The War of Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rxqueen on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 08:17:07 PM AEST (User
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This was a nice peice of work.
I really liked these two stanzas:
"Ground upon the stones of time
My spirit lifts again
It wraps itself in linens soft
My body's, not it's friend
My spirit and my body
a war without a word
They wage against each other
Yet not a sound is heard"
I am only 21, but already I feel out of sync, my soul and body. I am often calleimmature and childish, that I need to grow up. But I don't want to I guess. I don't want to get old. I want to be free from "time" and age forever. Loves it!
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Re: The War of Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 03:28:55 AM AEST (User
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Awesome truly awesome.... you poetry amazes me!!! |
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Re: The War of Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 03:41:32 PM AEST (User
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This is so how I get to feeling sometimes ... this is timeless Carol. Well done. I relate likeyou wouldn't believe.
Nazzy ~ |
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Re: The War of Time
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Monday, 11th April 2005 @ 07:04:19 PM AEST (User
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And do I ever relate as well!
You've spoken something that has been increasingly on my thoughts. As I think my spirit matures, I find the words of this poem grow truer and truer.
Well said, and thank you.
Andrew |
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