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Nothing In The Shadows (But Me)
Contributed by
Alina
on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:42:24 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Behind the shadows they're lurking
I see their deep penetrating yellow eyes flash at me
I see their white fangs dazzle
I see their black crisp wings slightly flap
In the shadows they're waiting
I hear their red hearts beating fiercely
I hear their thoughts screaming
I hear their lucious lips smacking...to taste me
From the shadows their hiding
I feel them hover above my shoulders
I feel their stenchful breath upon my cheeks
I feel their corse hair stroke upon my arms
Through the shadows their watching
There are only a few streetlights to shine their holiness in this empty place
And only garbage rustles in the gutters
The wind howls a frightful cry
The moon hides behind the clouds
And suddenly...
When all the shop windows draw their blinds and close their eyes
THEY grab me
THEY torture me
THEY pierce me
THEY kill me
Their breath is of sewer rats and carcasses
Their touch is of scaley fingers and prickly blood dripping nails
Their cries are of childrens nightmares and electricution chairs
But when I open my eyes from the chilling fear...
And look at the shadows
I realize...that there is nothing there
Only my fear
And that
THEY are in my head...
Copyright ©
Alina
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2005-03-24 13:42:24]
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Re: Nothing In The Shadows (But Me)
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by ChinaRivera on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 03:27:17 PM AEST
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| I absolutely loved this, since i feel the exact same way sometimes! |
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Re: Nothing In The Shadows (But Me)
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 03:43:46 PM AEST
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| needs to not be so repetetive and have the verses more than just simple statements. poetry isnt reading off a list of statements, poetry is more than that. your concept is fine, but, needs work on being better illustrated. |
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Re: Nothing In The Shadows (But Me)
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by SimplyMe on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 03:49:01 AM AEST
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Very Bone-chilling write. Good job.
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Nothing In The Shadows (But Me)
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by freckle on
Wednesday, 13th April 2005 @ 08:42:43 PM AEST
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Well, your descriptions were very vivid....yikes! I especially liked this line:
And only garbage rustles in the gutters
I thought that was a great line in with all the others. the flow was a little off in some spots but overall I think it was a pretty good write.
Carol |
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Re: Nothing In The Shadows (But Me)
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Friday, 15th April 2005 @ 07:06:50 PM AEST
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I love your descriptive language here.
--Ghosty |
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