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I Wanna Die
Contributed by
CrippinBabi513
on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:44:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
self-harmpoetry
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The tears i've shed
The blood i've bled
The screams i've shouted
The hopes i've dubted
All these I've done
Their what i've become
I thrieve on the pain
I live off the shame
The knife always leaves scares
But to me their beauty marks
I try to back away
But I love the feel of the blade
It's my turn to die
My death is suicide
But no one really cares
So I won't bother to say good-bye
Copyright ©
CrippinBabi513
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2005-03-24 12:44:20]
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:53:00 PM AEST
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It's good this is just writing, and not real.
Only problem with this is a couple of this spelt wrong. 'Doubted' and 'They're'
Great write otherwise.
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by allymp on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:16:50 PM AEST
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good writing...
i always write those kind of thing too but i love my life also...its really cool how u can feel how other people feel just for that second your writing it |
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by Kay-Kay on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 03:28:14 PM AEST
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great poem, emotional..i like your style with this one it's cool, keep up the great work.
~Kay-Kay |
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by Chanti on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 08:54:06 PM AEST
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"The knife always leaves scars
But to me they're beauty marks"
- beautiful lines |
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 27th March 2005 @ 06:08:52 PM AEST
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well I hope this is just writing because I can
relate to these feelings quite a bit. I liked how
it was written simply yet with such feeling.
Keep up the writing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 03:13:29 PM AEST
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There were somestrong lines here. I think you were able to include your reader in your sadness.
Nice job.
mj |
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Re: I Wanna Die
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by THUGGIN4REAL on
Monday, 4th April 2005 @ 05:02:34 PM AEST
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| nice write,we all live with battle scars,but those scars represents stories,and this story was well told |
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