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hand me the rain
Contributed by
In_a_While
on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 11:05:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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how does she feel?
that girl in the reel
who takes me to places i fear
what is she like?
a fawn or a fight
who takes me to places i fear
what is her hell?
in me could she tell
the places that make her feel fear
then again...
I'm broken like rain
catch me in vain
my roads are washing away
seek me in time
she's leaking in rhyme
i'm feeling tomorrow today
i'm a puppet of my own destruction
a wooden boy of poor construction
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Re: hand me the rain
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:05:15 PM AEST
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woah..I really like this.
What a great write.
I especially love the piece after 'then again...'
Fantastic write,
Thanks for sharing,
*hugs* Phil xxx |
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Re: hand me the rain
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by electrique_poet on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 09:32:11 PM AEST
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this is a very nice write, short sweet and expressive, i like the ending, well done
... in words electrique |
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Re: hand me the rain
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by reflections on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 07:23:35 AM AEST
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You are the product of your own construction
a poet in need of no instruction
Write about those things you know
You have the talent . . . let it flow
(John)
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Re: hand me the rain
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by footballfan385 on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2005 @ 05:09:37 PM AEST
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| nice peom, you sure do know a lot of words, lol, i wish i knew that many words and how to use them and all that, you'll probably do really good on the SAT's and stuff, assuming you haven't already taken it yet, you have great usage of the english langugage, so good job |
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