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Frozen Hearts
Contributed by
UnlovedChild
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Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 04:46:59 AM in AEST
Topic:
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A tear so cold
It shatters skin
Can you see the pain within?
Frozen hearts ready to crack
Help them warm so the feel of love will come back
The pain you feel
Strong inside
Oh hearts why do you hide
Join the circle
Where love is all around
Why are you so afraid
To open up
Are you afraid people will see
That you are another side
The one everyone should envy
Come on out
They are waiting to see
What you have locked away
All the memories
Unfreeze and show what all should know
What love is like
Copyright ©
UnlovedChild
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2005-03-24 04:46:59] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rxqueen on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 05:12:31 AM AEST (User
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Amy that was beautiful. I ecspecially liked the first stanza. You are really getting to be an amazing writer! |
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by Tanmaya on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 07:04:43 AM AEST (User
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I really liked the the way you began and ended this...
great write.
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by dreaming-of-your-love on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 08:13:33 AM AEST (User
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very good write i love it
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by In_a_while on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 09:47:59 AM AEST (User
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Very well written, i'm especially fond of "Unfreeze and show what all should know." I love clever word play! Good job |
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by KishaLovesCare126 on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 06:34:44 PM AEST (User
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very moving. I couldn't of put it better myself. |
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 10:44:56 PM AEST (User
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id rather not. excellent poem though, amy. keep up your writing, you are writing better according to that teacher of yours =] |
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by freckle on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 06:31:45 PM AEST (User
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A very beautiful poem Amy. You can really see how you are developing as a writer. Great work!
*Hugs*
Carol |
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Re: Frozen Hearts
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 31st March 2005 @ 06:14:53 PM AEST (User
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Great topic!
An insightful and cleverly written piece. |
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