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Torn
Contributed by
Nazmythian
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Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:42:56 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I look out in my driveway
I can see my future there
A busted, rusted Buick
Time forgot and no one cares
But I can see it shining
Like it did when it was new
It looks at me through
Cracked headlights
And says
Hey man, I'm just like you
Torn up, torn down, torn apart
Every day that I remain here
Is another start
In a life time of uncertainties
Yesterday's desire
Feeds tomorrow's dreams
I was placed right here by destiny
The day that I was born
But today ain't got no answers
So I just sit here
Torn
PS ... yes, that really is my car
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Nazmythian
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Re: Torn
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by WiltingSoul on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:08:00 AM AEST
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| That's really beautiful. I enjoyed reading it. It flows very nicely and paints an image. Great job. |
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:23:15 AM AEST
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| Wonderful write. The flow was awesome.. |
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by b_rand on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 01:55:17 AM AEST
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| definitely good stuff. nice metaphor |
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Re: Torn
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 04:18:10 AM AEST
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thats kinda sad nazzy.but written really well.
great job. |
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Re: Torn
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 06:16:11 AM AEST
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Scott, you know how much I love this, right?
Well..I can't say anymore then I have already, you know what I think; but I'll just remind you, I am always here for you, K? And though things may not be working out now, it doesn't mean they won't.
Here for you,
Much love,
Phil xxx
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by pixie on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 07:10:39 AM AEST
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wow Nazzy, that was deep, written so well 5/5
pix xx |
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Re: Torn
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by vibes2go on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:05:21 PM AEST
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placed here by destiny...still I'm gettin' reamed.
heheheheehe... loved it NAZ....
just pokin my head in.. thought I'd say hi.
Go to Oregon.. a friend of mine will paint that for you..he has a shop in Astoria..and we have a ...long time friendship.. he loves old things and I'm an old thing lol... nice to see ya buddy. |
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Re: Torn
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:05:28 PM AEST
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Hi Naz,
I guess a picture is worth a 1000 words; and the way you intersperse your words with the visual is masterful. The way you open your heart is what makes you so special, Naz. You portray a symbol of what was, what is, and what can be: I hope you are able to focus on the potential, not the "torn". I am really struck by ...Yesterdays desire...Feeds tomorrows dreams... Perhaps yesterdays desires, feed todays satisfactions, which lead to tomorrows dreams.
I'm getting kind of lengthly here, but if you are down or just need to talk, feel free to PM me at any time.... I'll be here.
Let me know if you are ok, my friend
Willofree, Terry |
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Re: Torn
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by SimplyMe on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 02:45:31 PM AEST
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I LOVED the way you compared yourself to a car. That was very creative. Wonderful write as well. I think everybody can compare themselves to something like this in life. Great job. Much love.
~Alucia~ |
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by freckle on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 07:27:45 PM AEST
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Good write Nazzy. Sad, but so true too. I like the pics!
Carol |
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 02:37:04 AM AEST
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It is those that look at the pictures/the car and see something unappealing that I feel badly for. Obviously, you have not forgotten it and you can still see it in its prime. Rust on an old car is like wrinkles on a person, I think --- it happens, but it doesn't make them any less wonderful.
I'm inclined to think that maybe you don't need to let go the dream... just perhaps redefine it? *feels sort of pushy saying that but can't help but think it feels right*
Classics, Nazzy... the car, the poem... you.
~Snemmy~
(who sees fifty years of memories and dreams, both past and present, sitting there) |
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Re: Torn
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by FleurdeSang on
Friday, 25th March 2005 @ 01:40:22 PM AEST
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:*( This is so incredibly sad, Scotty... I'm so sorry that you are feeling this way... And I'm glad that you are releasing your emotions in a healthy way. I can feel your pain, your struggle... A busted up Buick staring back at you, mocking, saying it is you... Damn, Scott... That is intense. Absolutely flawless and a real tear-jerker. Always know that you have friends here, and you can PM me whenever you need to talk, my friend. =) Remember, we are never alone in our times of darkness and sorrow... There are many hearts and souls out there, that are just as torn, cheri... All my love and comfort to a hurting friend. Forever,
Votre petit fleur,
Stephy. *huggles for Scotty.* |
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Re: Torn
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 07:27:09 PM AEST
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Christine has a sister...
--Ghosty |
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Re: Torn
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by critterhideaway on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 08:40:12 PM AEST
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| Gosh!! I had one almost like that!! You should paint it , restore it or just look at it I guess. Nice one |
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 30th March 2005 @ 02:06:09 AM AEST
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wow nice car lol.
an amazing write once again. |
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Re: Torn
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by Oceandreamer on
Wednesday, 4th May 2005 @ 05:58:01 PM AEST
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| Enjoyed reading it.Food for thought... |
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Re: Torn
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by lovingcritters on
Thursday, 21st July 2005 @ 06:42:05 AM AEST
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Dear Naz, my friend. You know me and my mind? What's left of it that is!!!!I look around your neighborhood, some pretty nice homes near by, and I think.........sometimes I do that also???What must your neighbors think of that Torn, rusty old heap parked right where everyone can see? Did you send them a copy of your well written poem?
I never know where you are going to take me Naz...............Men and their cars!!!
Delightful comparison also!
Warm love
consue*smiles* |
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 25th July 2006 @ 03:39:27 PM AEST
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| Aw, Nazz, I love that car!!!! Oh, and the poem too. Both are really cool! ! ! |
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