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I Wish
Contributed by
sick_n_twisted
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Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 08:57:10 PM in AEST
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I wish I had someone to love
Someone to cherish and always think of
I wish I had someone to put up with me
someone that will set my soul free
I wish I had someone who understands
someone whos strong and sticks they're lands
I want that day to come
Before I get comfortably numb
what if i will never love
no one to cherish or think of
what if i never have no one to put up with me
no one that will set me soul free
But i gotta think confident and straight
everyone finds some its the true fate
love...true love i belive
no longer...no longer i promise i wont deceive
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2005-03-23 20:57:10]
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Re: I Wish
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by nabokovfan87 on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 09:41:22 PM AEST
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| nice write two poems in one kinda. line six seems a little wierd thought. anyways nice attempt |
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Re: I Wish
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by kidpoet_213 on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 10:33:40 PM AEST
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Hey I agree... nice write. Line 6 does seem a lil werid. Never heard of that b4. All in all... a very good poem.
~Donna~ |
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Re: I Wish
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by b_rand on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 12:33:59 AM AEST
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| yeah good job, nice rhyme schemes. u definitely shouldn't have rushed line 6 though, it sticsk out like a sore thumb! |
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