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Coming Back..
Contributed by
JasTrask_22
on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 10:58:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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Sleeping under a palm tree...feel the rush of the ocean.
Swimming in the water...little kids playing with a ball.
Wind making a calm breeze...see butterflies passing by.
Tide splashing on the shore...seaweed gathers on the sand.
...But for a moment the tide must wait...and I'm gripping the surface now.
I'm coming back into this world.
That's enough of this make believe..
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2005-03-22 22:58:37]
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Re: Coming Back..
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 11:27:22 PM AEST
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| I'm not a big fan of the beach because I burn and sand make me nervous, lol, but I really liked this piece. Somehow you made the beach seem so beautiful and serene. I felt really relaxed while reading, and the imagery was great. Nice work! :-) |
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Re: Coming Back..
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 05:23:47 PM AEST
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| Cool write.............the ending got me. LOL Peace. |
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