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The Mysterious One
Contributed by
ell_03
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Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 10:42:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
mystical
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I can't help the way I am,
Or the things I do,
Just like I can't help,
How I feel about you.
I don't know who you are,
Or if you're even real,
I'm not quite sure just how,
You make me really feel.
You're there in the shadows,
When no one else is around,
You tell me all your secrets,
Though you never make a sound.
Copyright ©
ell_03
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2005-03-21 22:42:18]
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Re: The Mysterious One
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by SeptChill on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 10:57:37 PM AEST
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It's definatly a good start. You understand poetry, and how to write, but I myself couldn't wrap my mind around the poem. I don't understand what it means, perhaps pick a different topic?
But definitly keep going!
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Re: The Mysterious One
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by Dreama on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 10:59:04 PM AEST
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interesting one,
im getting its a metaphor but not sure who the mysterious one is ;)
keep on writing, good luck with the book!
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Re: The Mysterious One
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 12:07:06 AM AEST
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nice eerie shadowy flow
not bad |
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