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THAT ELUSIVE RELIEF
Contributed by
emphaticplacebo
on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 07:41:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I am going to kill myself tomorrow
I am going to relieve this life of any more pain
I am going to alleviate myself of any more sorrow
I am going to end this life of dissapointment and disdain
I pray that those who care will understand
I hope the void I leave fills with something better
I want my mortality to drift away int he wind like sand
I hope those who read it find reason in this letter
Like countless times before, I set eyes upon my death
Eerily surgical and sterile, the steel blade glistens bright
Sharpened to precision, I plot the crimson course of death
And await till the coming morning's first light
Reds, pinks and oranges replace the satin night sky
As my final hours emerge, I shed a single tear
Soon it will all be a memory, as I prepare to die
In my bathroom, I prepare to release my pains and fears
My hand trembles as I pick up my blade, cold and true
I hold it to my skin, just enough to feel the sharp edge
With a final breath, I seal my fate and fill my convictions
As I cut, crimson adorns my wrists and escapes swiftly
Staining the floor, which I now lay upon, gasping defeatedly
I slip into my final sleep and finally find that elusive relief
Copyright ©
emphaticplacebo
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2005-03-21 19:41:01]
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Re: THAT ELUSIVE RELIEF
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by Jen54 on
Saturday, 4th June 2005 @ 08:38:17 PM AEST
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this poem got to me. I once used to
think about killing myself. To have that
final breath. Feeling that all my pain and suffering will be gone.
Great write it !!!the emotion
in it was great. |
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Re: THAT ELUSIVE RELIEF
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by PuppyChow on
Sunday, 24th July 2005 @ 03:50:59 PM AEST
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| can i borrow this for a suicide note? nice poem. i do have tendacies to try and kill myself, so this really was good. i just might borrow it. hope thats okay.. |
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Re: THAT ELUSIVE RELIEF
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by guiltycircles on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 07:33:16 AM AEST
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| this is amazing...you magically create that eerie feeling that surrounds your own suicide through a beautiful use of words...well done |
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Re: THAT ELUSIVE RELIEF
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 29th August 2005 @ 03:55:11 PM AEST
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Wow... well it is good that you didn't kill
yourself, but what imagery it was insane! I
enjoyed the rhyme scheme it didn't sound
forced which can be the case at times and
instead really added to the poem. A great
write wow.
Bobo (Joel) |
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