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Hotel Texas
Contributed by
Rxqueen
on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 06:35:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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And after all was said and done,
the music low
and the sun
waking for the day,
it was there we lay.
That fast cash sleazy motel
(where inhibitions fell),
that dingy hole that for no reasons other than you,
was nothing less than a palace,
a paradise.
I was no whore last night
(no lollipop kissing fool)
I was a queen
I was beautiful
and I was yours
But the reality is
nothing can be so perfect
("all that glitters ain't gold"
and even it becomes tarnished and old)
the clock on that fuzzy old set was a bitter
sneering reminder.
Time.
Which tends in moments as these
to be robbed from starry eyes and dreamy hearts
Every minute was a hurtling second
but though they were fleeting,
each breath was cherished for all it was worth.
If ever a desire for life to stand still,
pause,
or even tread a little slower was to be had
it was there in the place I breathed you in
(skin on skin)
If ever I could hold on,
cling,
to something,
anything,
just a little longer
(please)
It would be you.
Then.
There.
It would be you...
But the tighter I wrapped around you
the more the sun,
peeking through that dirty window pane,
taunted.
As if its purpose all along was to deny me another taste of this secret perfection.
Morning had melted our night together
and in doing so it burned tired eyes and stung longing souls.
Dreams faded.
(Wishes rarely come true)
so it was then I had to leave my palace
and kiss sleepy goodbyes to you.
Copyright ©
Rxqueen
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2005-03-21 18:35:49]
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 06:39:22 PM AEST
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WELCOME 2 THE HOTEL CALIFORNIA
A BEAUTIFUL PEICE OF WRITTING RX
LIKE THE STYLE OF THIS ONE . . .
DORIAN CAHMBERS |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by shelby on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 06:42:22 PM AEST
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vivid images and details nice style
Michelle |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 06:48:20 PM AEST
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This was both joyful and tragic to read.
The imagery was right there, it held me from begining to end.
Seems odd to say this but a song comes to mind...
You can't always get what you want, but if you try sometime, you just might find, you get what you need...
Don't change a thing in it. |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 07:09:56 PM AEST
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that dingy hole that for no reasons other than you,
was nothing less then a palace,
some things can be transforming. I enjoyed this. |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st March 2005 @ 08:03:12 PM AEST
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| Well I I'm in a hotel in Texas right now, where someone's kids running up and down the hall and slamming doors are driving me nuts. .. And wishing felt like that. and thinking.maybe I'm too old to feel like that. ..But anyway it reminds me of younger years when anywhere, anytime would have been exceptional. lovely write! |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 22nd March 2005 @ 04:12:00 AM AEST
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Damn girly, that was just mid blowing. Such great imagery, your such a talented writer you make you're poems so life like you make us feel every emotion you have.
Great write seetie, can i visit the hotel now?
Jane |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2005 @ 01:28:43 AM AEST
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Very talented writer u r.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by UnlovedChild on
Thursday, 24th March 2005 @ 05:56:39 AM AEST
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| A very talented write from a very talented writer. What a perfect match. Great job Jocie! |
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Re: Hotel Texas
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 28th March 2005 @ 07:11:48 PM AEST
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Room Service!
Time to check out.
--Ghosty |
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